Answers to improving sentences.
Below you will find different ways sentences could be improved to get a higher band score in IELTS writing task 2.
International charities have large funds. Local charities have small funds.
- International charities have large funds, while local charities have small funds.
- Larger funds are available to international charities compared to local charities which have relatively smaller funds.
Some natural disasters affect thousands of people. These situations require the aid of international charities.
- Some natural disasters affect thousands of people and, therefore, require the aid of international charities.
- Natural disasters, such as earthquakes and tsunamis, can have disastrous consequences for thousands of people and for this reason the amount of aid required can only be provided by international charitable organisations.
Local charities know the needs of local people. Local charities can support both individuals and small groups.
- As local charities know the needs of local people, they are able to support both individuals and small groups.
- Local charities are able to support both individuals and small groups because they understand the needs of local people.
Local charities do not have big financial resources. They are still vital to the welfare of people within local communities.
- Even though local charities do not have big financial resources, they are still vital to the welfare of people within local communities.
- Despite local charities having limited funding and resources, they still play a vital role in providing support and caring for the welfare of people within local communities.
All charities need donations. International charities can draw donations from many wealthy countries. International charities have the money needed to promote their organisation. Local charities are less known but still require donations. Local charities must rely mainly on fund raising events.
- It is clear that all charities need donations in order to do their work effectively and offer aid when needed. International charities are able to draw donations from many wealthy countries through their capacity to promote their cause on a global scale. This is not the case with local charities who are not as well known and rely on receiving money through fund raising in local communities.
- It is clear that all charities need donations in order to do their work effectively and offer aid when needed. While international charities are able to draw donations from many wealthy countries through their capacity to promote their cause on a global scale, local charities are not as well known and rely on receiving money through fund raising in local communities. (This last sentence is very long. Do not try this unless you are excellent in English)
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