IELTS Model Answer Bar Chart October 2018

IELTS bar chart model answer for writing task 1 October 2018

This bar chart appeared in IELTS writing task 1 this month. The model answer below will help you understand how to organise your ideas and support your statements with data. Also check the 10 useful tips below to help you understand the model answer better.

You can download the bar chart above here: IELTS Writing task 1 October 2018

IELTS Model Answer Writing Task 1 Oct 2018

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of women, men and children consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables each day in 8 years from 2001 to 2008 in the UK.

Overall, it can be seen that the highest percentage of all people consuming fruit and vegetables was women, while children consistently accounted for the lowest proportion. Furthermore, a significant increase in the proportion of people eating these food items can be seen over the period given.

The percentage of women who ate fruit and vegetables started at just over 20% in 2001. This figure then rose steadily to reach a peak of almost 35% in 2006, before falling slightly to 30% in the final year.

In terms of men and children eating fruit and vegetables, the rate remained relatively stable in the first three years (about 17% and 12% respectively). From this point, the proportion of men climbed gradually to peak at about 27% in both 2006 and 2007, after which it dropped to about 26%. A similar growth in the figure for children was evident reaching 25% in 2007 and around 24% in the final year.

Tips for Analysing the Model Answer:

  1. Paraphrasing does not need to be complicated. Not all words can be changed all the time. Choose which words you will and won’t change. Trying to paraphrase too often will result in too many errors and a lower score.
  2. Highlight highs, lows and trends in your overview where possible.
  3. Make sure statements in your body paragraph are supported by data.
  4. Make sure paragraphs are easy to see.
  5. Remember this is a report, not an essay
  6. Look at the logical organisation of information in the model answer above. It is easy to read and not confusing. If your report is confusing to read because you jump about with information, it is a bad report. All reports should be logical and clear.
  7. Check the linking words used.
  8. Note the variation in sentence structures.
  9. Don’t overload your report with too many small details – be selective.
  10. Aim for around 170-190 words. This model answer is 184 words in length. You do not need to write your word count on your test paper.

I hope you found this useful. For more tips and lessons, go to the RED BAR at the top of the website and see the relevant section of the test.

Please note, GT candidates have a letter in task 1 and nothing else.

All the best

Liz

 

 

Comments

  1. Dear Liz, kindly check my writing and give your valuable comment please.

    The bar chart illustrates the number of British people divided by 3 groups (men, women, and children) who ate 5 portions of fruit and vegetables daily from 2001 to 2008.

    Overall, among the three groups on the list in that period, women group is the largest and reached the highest peak in 2006 before it began to drop a little bit in 2007. While women were reasonably increasing, men and children remained stable in the first 3 years (2001 to 2003) and climbed up in 2004 until 2007.

    In 2001, women ate approximately 22% of fruit and vegetables followed by men and children. This figure then rose gradually year by year until 2006, the women got the highest peak which was around 35% but the number just dropped under 30% in 2007 and 2008.

    Men and children on the other hands froze for the first 3 years which was about 12% of men and 17% respectively. Both groups were incremental from 2004 before they slightly fell down just under 25% of children and around 27% of men in 2008.

  2. Saiful Islam says

    The bar diagram above gives information about the proportion of UK residents (men, women, and children) fruits and vegetable consumption each day over an eight years time period (from 2001 to 2008).
    Overall, it can be seen that the general trend of food consumption is increasing over the time period where women consumed the highest percentage of fruits and vegetable than both the men and children in any time period.
    In the case of women, the consumption of fruits and vegetable started from more than 20% in 2001 which increased steadily over time and reached a peak value of about 35% in 2006 and then decreased slightly.
    Meanwhile, the men and children ate the fruits and vegetable in a steady manner during the first three years (about 12% and 17% respectively). From this point, the proportion of men increased gradually and reached a peak of 28% (2006 and 2007) and then dropped to 26% in the final year. A similar growth pattern of children proportion was evident in the chart and the highest percentage of about 26% was obtained in 2007 that decreased in the final year (about 23%) of the time period.

  3. The column chart demonstrates the information about the total proportion of people who ate fruits and vegetables each day in the united kindom from the period of 2001 till 2008. The data was given in percentage .

    It is apparently seen in the data , from 2001 to 2006 , the highest food was consumed by women .that is above 30 % . In spite of this, men expenditure was similar to around 15 % throughout the first four year period . While next two year the consumption of men amplified roughly one quarter .the least percentage was come in children to food consumption .just around 23% during the time period.

    In term of 2007 to 2008, the proportion of men and children constipation for food was exclusively 2 % different and women had 32% and 33% in last two year .

    Overall ,it can be seen that , the highest proportion of women was stable in all year while , least number was children but in the ending year the consumption of food had inclined little bit. furthermore, according to overall period consumption of food had intensified by people .

  4. Hello liz..u r so helpful.i have some questions
    Should i always write each sentence in past tense in writing task 1? Or can i mix up present or past tense

    • If the dates are in the past, all description (except for the introduction – the graph shows…) will be past tense. This is not about IELTS rules, it is about appropriate use of English grammar. Always follow normal English grammar rules.

  5. Thankyou so much for taking the time and effort for all the lectures. God bless you. Ameen

  6. Hello Lisa,
    Thank you for your help and support. I have started watching your videos recently. And am finding it very helpful. I have my exam in the next week. Could you please guide me on the below essay.

    The bar graph illustrates the rate at which the inhabitants (men, women and children) consume five portions of fruits and vegetables each day in the UK from the period 2001 till 2008.

    Overall, the pattern has always remained same every year in which women have been the highest, second is the men and children being the least in consumption. The year 2006 have shown the highest consumption in men and women while children show their best in the following year (2007).

    The percentage of consumption from the years 2001 till 2006 shows the significant difference on food consumption. The highest difference is seen in 2004 for which women is almost 30% while men and children are seen to be about 22% and 17% respectively.

    The years 2006 to 2008 show differences but are minimal as compared to the years before 2006. The least difference is seen in the year 2007 with almost 2%. Hence the trend seems to minimize the difference by gradually increasing the consumption rate in all categories and significantly decreasing the difference of rates as well after the year 2006.

  7. Amine Aissou says

    That was abesolutly thank you ma’am LiZ

  8. Kamran Ali says

    Its very helpful for me to get important points for my task#1.
    Thanks Mam liz

  9. Vikram kumar says

    Is it cause low marks to have differnt length of BP1 and BP2. In case of 1 have 40 words and 2 have 70.

  10. Boenstein says

    I saw your video on Chinese INS at first, and then followed the links to find your website. Your tips for the candidates are really helpful! Thank you so much Liz!

  11. very helpful mom, but just have a litle bit nervous befor my exam day

  12. Navinder Singh says

    Your tips gave us so many ideas to write on a report
    Thank you so much Liz…………!

  13. Muhammad Usman says

    My all confusions and uncertainties regarding task 1 have vanished. Extremely useful and quite helping. Thanks a bunch Liz.

  14. I found this sample very helpful.
    Thanks Liz

  15. Thank you Liz! Your advice and lessons are very helpful and clear and easy to understand!

  16. Thanks mam

  17. Sheikh Layes says

    Really helpful.

  18. You made it easy and interesting, thanks ma’am.

  19. Pardeep Sally says

    Hi Mam,

    The tips and lesson shared you are very helpful. Thankyou for guiding us to success.

    Best Wishes
    Pardeep

  20. Rafael Rachid Barbieri Bacha says

    Liz, thank you for the sample report. Even though you used “these items” once, you still wrote four times “fruits and vegetables”, is it fine to repeat that much? Is it possible to use “healthy foods” instead to avoid repeating these words? My greatest of this report was to find substitute words for “fruits and vegetables”. I appreciate your attention.

    • The bar chart is about people eating fruit and vegetables. You can’t alter that. It is not about eating miso soup which is a healthy food. It is not about eating bread, or eating minerals or eating vitamins. It is about eating fruit and vegetables. Of course, those words will be repeated.

  21. Hiii Liz , I am so glad of you and your’s tips. However, I have a little bit nervous about this exam. Any tips and other information for me, please.
    Thanks

    • Go to the RED BAR at the top of the website and click on the aspect you wish to learn. There are over 300 pages of free tips, lessons, information, videos, model answers etc – make the most of them.

  22. Hey Liz, thanks for all your lessons.

    One question regarding the sample essay: Is it okay to write what might come off as an educated estimate? For example, consider numbers 12% and 17% as the consumption details of men and children. Is it alright or should we just say “a little over 10%” for 12% and so on? By doing this, we only would have used the numbers labelled in the graph(the 10% mark on y-axis). Your thoughts?

    • You can describe the number or percentage as you showed. 12% = a little over 10%. But then you must give the actual figure in brackets = a little over 10% (12%). This means for that example is would be a waste of time doing it. But if the percentage was 26%, you could write “just over a quarter (26%)”.

      • Hi Liz
        In one of your videos you said that do not give actual numbers because you are not sure so just write little over 10% but here you are contradicting your statement. please help

        • You need to pay more attention to what I say. That video was about numbers that are not clearly given in the chart. If the data is clear and the figure is precisely 150,000 – of course you give it. The words “about” or “a little over” are for numbers that are not precise – that is the meaning of the words.

      • If we have not given the estimation in brackets but just written- ‘ just over 10 percent’ or ‘under 25 percent’ , will examiner deduce our marks for that?

        • It would affect your score for Task Achievement and your ability to support statements with accurate data. This is not a descriptive report – it is a factual report. Task 1 is report, not an essay.

          • Ma, I think what we’re trying to say is that, 12% or 26% are not marked in the bar chart, but 10% and 25% are clearly marked. So, how do we know when to use 12% and not 13%, or 26% and not 28%?

            • If it looks as though it is 12%, but you cannot be 100% sure, you must use “just over 10%”. That is the reason for the use of approximate words. It is also possible to write “about 12%” – again, you saying approximately which warns the reader it is not an exact number.

  23. Thanks for your kinds Liz, It useful and really important for me, I got several idea from this practice.

  24. You are a great facilitator Liz, this is the best strategy ever for IELTS Writing task 1.
    appreciated.

  25. With due respect and love,
    Highly appreciate your effort and precious time… Stay healthy and blessed mam….
    Warm regards,
    Kartar

  26. Hi liz,
    It helped me a lot to overcome my obstacles in writing skills .
    Thank you

  27. Thank you so much. You have the best and easiest method for ielts test preparation. Thanks alot.

  28. I had this paper on 27 October, i could not understand how i got 6.5 in writing since it all seemed easy. After seeing your review, i have realised there are many mistakes i made.

  29. It was the same I had in London , October 2018. But it was talking about weekly consumption and about fruits only not with vegetables.

  30. IT IS REALLLY A WORTHFUL LESSON…THANK YOU MADAM

  31. Larysa Movchan says

    it was very nice to work with. Thanks a lot!

  32. Can I use the same format for writing map report

  33. Thanks alot Liz, this is very helpful

  34. Emad Helal says

    Thank Liz for your great efforts, but i have such a trivial question:
    gradually climbed or climbed gradually.

    Thanks a million 🙂

  35. Like

  36. Thanks a whole lot ma. I wrote a report and evaluated myself with the provided model answer. It was of very great help. I believe that with the way and method of teaching of yours, I would improve to a large extent in my skills in tackling ielts questions.

  37. Liz, Thank you so much

  38. sarfraz masih says

    Many thanks

  39. Rosibel Martinez says

    Dear : Liz,

    Thank so much I appreciated that,

    Best regards,

  40. A lot of thanks miss for guidance

  41. Thank you mam

  42. Is this for a cademic??

  43. u are one of the best teacher in my eyes ,thanx a lot for being a tutor for us

  44. Thanks Liz

  45. hi liz
    do we need to leave a line while starting from a fresh paragrah?

    • There is no fixed rule. However, if the examiners can’t easily see your paragraphs, you will get a lower score. So, leaving an empty line is a good strategy.

  46. First,I’d like to thank you for your a great work.It’s really useful…

    Could you help me for this please?
    Is it correct if I add (The units are measured in percentages) to introduction ?

  47. Anitha M S says

    Mam quite helpful. My answer shuold be improved a lot. Thanks though

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