Improving IELTS Writing Task 1 Introduction

This lesson focuses on improving your IELTS writing task 1 introduction for the academic paper. To write an introduction you must paraphrase and re-write the information given by IELTS about the chart of graph.

Below is a sample line graph sent to me by a student.

The line graph below shows the number of overseas students who came from six Asian countries to study in Australia from 1994 to 1997.

overseas students line graph ielts

Source: Graph above was not created by IELTS Liz.

Here are two introductions written by the student. Would you use one of these introductions or would you write a different introduction?

  1. The amount of students from six different countries in Asia, who came to study in Australia between 1994 and 1997.
  2. Between 1994 and 1997 the number of Asian students from six different countries, who came to study in Australia.

Decide how you would write your introduction, before you look at the model.  Model Introduction

The line graph illustrates how many students went to Australia to study from six different countries in in Asia (Japan, Singapore, Hong Kong, Malaysia, Indonesia and Korea) over a period of four years between 1994 and 1997.

How would you organise your task 1 writing for the above line graph? How many paragraphs would you have? What information would you put in the body paragraphs?  Answers

You should have 4 paragraphs: introduction, overview, body paragraph A and body paragraph B.

In body paragraph A, you can put information about Singapore, Malaysia, Indonesia and Korea. In body paragraph B, you can put information about Japan and Hong Kong because they showed different trends from the others.

 

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Comments

  1. Chinenye says

    Dear Liz,
    In your usual kindness, do please help me check my take on this. I will be glad to read your comment as it will aid my improvement.
    Thank you
    Chinenye

    The line graph illustrates how many students from six Asian countries ( Japan, Singapore, Hong Kong, Malaysia, Indonesia and Korea)that traveled to study in Australia from 1994 to 1997.

    Overall, Korea citizens formed the highest population of Asian students in Australia while Singapore accounted for the least. Furthermore, there was a continuous increase of students from Asian continent over the period given.

    Singapore and Malaysia started off at about 7,500 and 9,500 students in 1994 respectively and they both recorded steady increase of about 2,000 students per year, while the Indonesian population increase for the four year period fluctuated within the range of 2,000 to 3,800.

    In addition, Korea and Japan students were about 9,500 in 1994, climbed rapidly and peaked at above 20,000 and 13,000 before a sharp decline to slightly above 18,000 and 12,000 in the final year respectively. On the other hand, students from Hong Kong were above 14,000 in the first year, decreased to 12,500 in 1996 before an upward surge to shortly below 14,000 at the end.

  2. Just to share my answers with others, here is my answer after the introduction. From what I learned from the other posts, I need to cover most of the information in the graph, but it exceeds 190. Any ideas?

    Overall, there was an increase in the number of studnets from four countries (Malaysia, Korea, Indonesia and Singapore) while the figure dropped over the frist three years regarding Hongkong and Japan.

    There was constant increase in Malaysian students to around 16000. Similarly, the number of students from Indonesia and Singapore rose gradually over given period. However, the number of Singaporean students was the lowest at around 8000 in 1994 while Indonesian students were the second largest number of 110000 at the start of the period. Regarding Korean students, it began at around 10000 and rose dramatically by double in 1996. From that point, the figure dropped slightly the next year.

    On the other hand, there were the most students from Hongkong in 1994 and this figure fell gradually in the following three years before increasing to around 14000 in 1997. There were just over 9000 Japanese students in 1994 and it increased constantly to a high of approximately 13500 in 1996, which then declined to 12000 at the end of the period.

  3. UDIT KUMAR says

    Hello Mam,
    It been my first qerry ever in this website. I would like to know about short and quick writing tips for both the tasks. How would I decorate my writing tasks I & II with the use of lucrative vocabs ? Is there any marks deduction on handwriting ? Please enlighten me on this part, because my exam is on 2nd august 2018.
    I need your assistance for other sections too.
    Regards
    UDIT

  4. Hi, Liz
    This the introduction I wrote.
    “The line graph illustrates how many abroad students traveled to Australia for further education from several Asian countries (Japan, Singapore, Hong Kong, Malasia, Indonesia, and Korea.) through three years period (1994 until 1997).”

    if you may give me your opinion and around what mark I might get to intro like this one.

    thank you.

  5. hello mam can you plz tell about descriptoes for writing task 2 …… my exam is very near … i have so many problums in task 2 .. plz help me mam

  6. hlo mam,
    my exam in 27 august 2016.. plzz help me .
    i have a question that can i write overview as a ‘overall’ for task 1
    and if i do not write conclusion then it will not effect my band score
    plz help me i’m in trouble

  7. syed yaser says

    hey could someone help me out

  8. Thanks a lot for your sharing 🙂

  9. Hi liz

    Thank you very much for all your efforts.

    I used to teach English too (ESL) and now I’ll be taking the IELTS on December 12.
    I’m a bit nervous because I’ve been living in a non-English speaking country for almost 2 years now and I worry that might do as well as I hoped.

    Subscribing to your lessons, helped bring back my confidence in my English ability. I really hope I’d do good this coming Saturday. Someday, I want to help people too just like what you’re doing.

    Again, thank you very much and I wish you all the best

    Best regards,

    Mela

  10. Shawn Debnath says

    Hello,Mam
    I am from Bangladesh. Nowadays i am going to a coaching center.In Your lecture you mentioned to give OVERVIEW but our writing teacher told me to give only introduction and body paragraph of all group (paragraph A ,B ,C so on)….Is OVERVIEW a must structure for line graph,pie chart,bar chart and over all task 1?

  11. Dear Liz!

    I wrote my own introduction, then I checked the model. I might be paraphrasing too much. Is “pupils” a good paraphrase for “students”? And “foreign” for “overseas”? Or is it advisable to paraphrase in this specific case?

    Thank you for your answer.

  12. hi Liz,
    Thanks a lot for ur class..very informative.i almost gave up studying ielts ,then by accidently i got a chance to watch ur video..Now i am very much interested in developing my skills to achieve ielts.May god bless u abunfantly..u r very good teacher…

  13. hi mam,
    Could you please correct my introduction and overview?
    Thank you.
    The line graph illustrates the amount of international students from six different countries in Asia (Japan, Singapore, Hong kong, Malaysia, Indonesia and Korea) who went to Australia to pursue various courses over a four year period from 1994.
    Overall,the students from Singapore, Malaysia and Indonesia showed an upward trend to go to Australia. Similarly,the amount of Korean and Japanese students increased in the first three years, however it dropped in the following year. In contrast, there was a fluctuation among Hong Kong students in the given period. in the final year, the highest number of students who came to Australia were from Korea and Indonesia.

  14. Mam in introduction part if they mentioned in percentages, can we write that” units r measured in percentages” is it correct?
    Thank you

  15. abhishek says

    PLS CHECK IT…

    The line graph illustrates the number of students who came to Australia from 6 different Asian countries (Japan,Hongkong,Korea,Singapore,Malaysia,Indonesia)over a period of 4 years from 1994 to 1997.
    Overall,there was a steady raise in the number of Asian students from Indonesia,Malaysia,Hongkong and Singapore who came to Australia as compared to Korea and Japan which slumped over past 3 years.

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