Opinion Essay Introduction: The Thesis Statement

In an IELTS opinion essay for writing task 2, your introduction has a background statement and a thesis statement. You should aim for between 40 to 50 words for the length of your essay introduction. While the background statement introduces the topics, the thesis statement is your answer to the task given by IELTS. It should introduce the main points and show the direction your essay will take. Below are two possible introductions with different thesis statements for the following IELTS task.

IELTS Task 2

The increase in the amount of traffic is responsible for growing problems in many large cities and this has resulted in more traffic congestion, particularly at rush hour. What measures could be taken to deal with this problem?

Essay Introductions

The introductions below have different thesis statements. Which one do you think is the best?

1. The growth in the quantity of traffic in most major cities has led to problems of congestion in the peak travel hours. There are a number of solutions to this issue which I will discuss in this essay.

2. The growth in the quantity of traffic in most major cities has led to problems of congestion in the peak travel hours. This can be solved by having a traffic free zone and improving the public transportation system offered to the public.

Answer

Number 2 is the best introduction.

Although the first introduction has academic language in the thesis statement, it is not appropriate for a high score essay in IELTS. IELTS is a test of your ability to use your own language not your ability to learn an academic sentence and use it in your essay. Therefore, introduction number 2 shows the main points and uses language directly relating to the task.

 

Recommended Lessons

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  1. Iffat nafees says:

    Liz I am bit confused about advantages and disadvantages essays.do I need to put advantage and disadvantages separately or just like option essay in a paragarph.??????

  2. Hi Liz,
    I have been attempted IELTS more than 6 times.
    Each time I get the required overall score which is 7.5. However I don’t get the required score for the individual modules(which is 7). For instance if I get a score 8 in listening, 7.5 in reading and 7.5 in speaking, i get only 6.5 in writing. At the same time , in the next attempt i get a 7.5 in writing with a reading score of 6.5. this continues to happen in each attempts i make. Any one of the module will be scored 6.5 each time (even I got a 6.5 in listening when i had all my modules markred 7.5. This make me depressed . Please help me .
    thank you

  3. Resmi nair says:

    Some people think that the government spend money on public service rather that wasting money on the arts .to what extend do you agree ? Allocating state funds for arts considered to be unfair for many , so according to them state funds should used used for the betterment of the public services. In my opinion , major share of public funds should necessarily be used for the basic requirement for the people such as health care system and public transport , but minimal support from state would help for the conservation of arts and culture for the future . Firstly, spending huge amount of state revenue on arts adversely affect on service sectors , mainly based on health . Recently , there is a tremendous growth in number of people who rely on hospital for both acute and chronic illness .lf the government fail to cope up with the public needs ,that lead to the deterioration of health of a society as a whole . Consequently , this would worsen the standard of health delivering services of the country. Another point to consider before investing public funds on arts is , it can weaken transportation system of the country . Whether the country developed or developing ,popularity of the public transport always remains the same , most citizen rely on public transport for their daily commuting . In such cases scarcity of enough funding would cause ineffective services . Moreover many solitary agencies will take over from government , which can result service users to pay exorbitant ticket prices . This would certainly become unaffordable and that weaken the infrastructure of the specific country . Finally , role of art and museums on prosperity of country’s culture is undeniable,so that sufficient contribution on conservation of those arts are worthwhile . More precisely , museums and art galleries are valuables that handed over by our ancestors , so it’s our turn to give adequate protection and also hand that over to our future generation . For that, little aid from state would be better off for the protection of those valuables. In conclusion , investing state funds on art is not feasible because government has got various other sectors to consider . However , offering financial aid for art is applicable for its protection and promotion .

  4. HELLO LIZ I HAVE A QUESTION
    CAN WE WRITE “THE RELATIVE IMPORTANCE OF TRAFFIC AND ITS PROBLEM IS A FREQUENT TOPIC OF DISCUSSION ” IN THE START OF THE INTRODUCTION…..

  5. Is “has lead” correct?

  6. Dr.Saqib Ali says:

    hello mam!
    kindly tell me about different discourse markers one can use in speaking?
    thanks

  7. hello mam, is this thesis is right ?
    in the following text , I will ponder upon the entire articulates verdiction on it

  8. Dzung Tran says:

    Hi Liz,
    Thank you for all the stuff you’ve been doing so far because I find them really helpful in order to achieve a great band score on the IELTS test.
    I have a question here. I know that the introduction 2 is way better. But I’m afraid that if I write my introduction in that way which gives the two main solutions then I probably won’t be able to paraphrase these two in the beginnings of each of my body paragraphs and also my conclusion. As a matter of fact, this might lower my score in terms of lexical resource because I run out of vocabulary. Am I right ?

    • You can repeat words in IELTS and still get a high score. Paraphrasing skills should be demonstrated but that doesn’t mean you change the words all the time. English has a limited number of words in the language so it is normal that some words are repeated. Aim for accuracy at all times.
      Liz

  9. Hi Liz,
    Is it necessary to include all my solutions in the introduction part? I’m afraid that I can not expand the two ideas of having a traffic free zone and improving the public transportation system enough, so in order to reach 250 words, I may include more small solutions which take one or two sentences each. But if I include them in the introduction, it seems tedious. How can I do in this case?
    Thank you very much!

    • I don’t really understand what you mean. Each body paragraph should contain one solution and each body paragraph should be equally developed. You can’t put one solution in one body paragraph and then two solutions in the next body paragraph. Your paragraphs must be planned properly and your solutions must be explained clearly.
      All the best
      Liz

      • I get it!
        I was just afraid that I have no enough descriptions for one solution a while back so I hoped to achieve 250 words by adding more solutions which seems not working now. I will try to focus one solution with more actual examples.
        Thanks a lot !!!

    • Your task is to answer the question and the question is about language not tourism. Don’t get distracted because there is extra information given by IELTS. You must identify what the issues are that you are responding to. This essay is easy because there’s a direct question for you to answer.
      All the best
      Liz

  10. Hi liz
    I find problem in writing please help me to get better score.
    I have tried an essay please correct it so that I can improve.
    The growth in the quantity of traffic tends to increase problem in major cities therefore, it has lead issue of congestion in the peak travel hours. they can be solved by having various traffic zones and improving the public transportation system offered to the public.
    Firstly, places should be divided into different zone, such as traffic free zone, school zone, heavy vehicle zone. Such areas must be traveled in a strict rule so that no misuse can cause traffic problem. Mostly in the main cities where most important work are to be finalized within a short period of time, one has to struggle half of the time in traffic to get to the destination. If provided free traffic zone t these areas, it will positively solve the problem of congestion and help smooth flow of work more easy and conveniently.
    Moreover, people’s improve their health unknowingly doing walking exercise.
    Another measure to control traffic problem is through making public transportation more available to the public. Government transportation should be accessible in different parts of country, mostly in cities in a large number. Frequent travel time and cheaper fare will increase in use of public transport in which people feel more comfortable and convenient in using these transportation rather than their own, undoubtedly, decrease congestion through fewer vehicles. People are motivated in saving money if provided minimal fare in government vehicle. More flow of public transport helps people prefer to use such transport most. thus, the less use of private vehicle will obviously play a vital role in minimizing traffic congestion.
    In a conclusion, traffic problems can be solved easily if different zones are adopted strictly as well as the government implement more flexible travel rate and increase number of transportation to public.

    • It’s a good essay but your paragraphs are difficult to see. This will be a problem in the test. Leave an empty line between paragraphs.
      Liz

      • Hi liz
        thank you for your reply,I’m really worried with my writing part. I’m aiming band 7 in gt test so could you please help me. is it possible to guess a line to above essay. My vocabulary and grammar are terribly bad.

        • You must have very good English to get band score 7. If your vocabulary and grammar are not strong, you will need to improve them.
          Liz

  11. Hi Liz,
    Just a silly question, what is a traffic free zone?
    Thanks

    • It’s a good question. It means an area where traffic can’t enter. Many cities have a traffic free zone in the center which is open to only people not vehicles.
      Liz

  12. Hi Liz,
    I am a bit confuse about which task for this writing because you wrote in the first sentence; for Writing task 1 – but I think this is for task 2, not 1.
    What do you think?
    Hassan

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