This lesson focuses on improving your IELTS writing task 1 introduction for the academic paper. To write an introduction you must paraphrase and re-write the information given by IELTS about the chart of graph.
Below is a sample line graph sent to me by a student.
The line graph below shows the number of overseas students who came from six Asian countries to study in Australia from 1994 to 1997.
Here are two introductions written by the student. Would you use one of these introductions or would you write a different introduction?
- The amount of students from six different countries in Asia, who came to study in Australia between 1994 and 1997.
- Between 1994 and 1997 the number of Asian students from six different countries, who came to study in Australia.
Decide how you would write your introduction, before you look at the model. Model Introduction
How would you organise your task 1 writing for the above line graph? How many paragraphs would you have? What information would you put in the body paragraphs? Answers
You should have 4 paragraphs: introduction, overview, body paragraph A and body paragraph B.
In body paragraph A, you can put information about Singapore, Malaysia, Indonesia and Korea. In body paragraph B, you can put information about Japan and Hong Kong because they showed different trends from the others.
Hi, Liz
This the introduction I wrote.
“The line graph illustrates how many abroad students traveled to Australia for further education from several Asian countries (Japan, Singapore, Hong Kong, Malasia, Indonesia, and Korea.) through three years period (1994 until 1997).”
if you may give me your opinion and around what mark I might get to intro like this one.
thank you.
Are you serious?Miss Liz, you have wrote the best introduction ever !
hello mam can you plz tell about descriptoes for writing task 2 …… my exam is very near … i have so many problums in task 2 .. plz help me mam
See this page: http://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-2-band-scores-5-to-8/ and this one: http://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-2/
hlo mam,
my exam in 27 august 2016.. plzz help me .
i have a question that can i write overview as a ‘overall’ for task 1
and if i do not write conclusion then it will not effect my band score
plz help me i’m in trouble
There is no conclusion for task 1, only for task 2.
hey could someone help me out
Thanks a lot for your sharing 🙂
Hi liz
Thank you very much for all your efforts.
I used to teach English too (ESL) and now I’ll be taking the IELTS on December 12.
I’m a bit nervous because I’ve been living in a non-English speaking country for almost 2 years now and I worry that might do as well as I hoped.
Subscribing to your lessons, helped bring back my confidence in my English ability. I really hope I’d do good this coming Saturday. Someday, I want to help people too just like what you’re doing.
Again, thank you very much and I wish you all the best
Best regards,
Mela
*not do as well as I hoped*
Good luck!
Hello,Mam
I am from Bangladesh. Nowadays i am going to a coaching center.In Your lecture you mentioned to give OVERVIEW but our writing teacher told me to give only introduction and body paragraph of all group (paragraph A ,B ,C so on)….Is OVERVIEW a must structure for line graph,pie chart,bar chart and over all task 1?
The examiner is looking for an overview for all academic writing task 1 (diagrams, maps, tables, pie charts, bar charts and line graphs). This is not an opinion, it is a fact. IELTS have made this very clear in their band score descriptors, see Task Achievement: https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/sites/default/files/IELTS_task_1_Writing_band_descriptors.pdf Check to see if your teacher has completed the IELTS examiner training.
All the best
Liz
Dear Liz!
I wrote my own introduction, then I checked the model. I might be paraphrasing too much. Is “pupils” a good paraphrase for “students”? And “foreign” for “overseas”? Or is it advisable to paraphrase in this specific case?
Thank you for your answer.
It is possible to use “pupils”. And to use “overseas”.
Liz
hi Liz,
Thanks a lot for ur class..very informative.i almost gave up studying ielts ,then by accidently i got a chance to watch ur video..Now i am very much interested in developing my skills to achieve ielts.May god bless u abunfantly..u r very good teacher…
You’re welcome. I’m glad I could help 🙂
Liz
hi mam,
Could you please correct my introduction and overview?
Thank you.
The line graph illustrates the amount of international students from six different countries in Asia (Japan, Singapore, Hong kong, Malaysia, Indonesia and Korea) who went to Australia to pursue various courses over a four year period from 1994.
Overall,the students from Singapore, Malaysia and Indonesia showed an upward trend to go to Australia. Similarly,the amount of Korean and Japanese students increased in the first three years, however it dropped in the following year. In contrast, there was a fluctuation among Hong Kong students in the given period. in the final year, the highest number of students who came to Australia were from Korea and Indonesia.
Please read my notice about posting writing: http://ieltsliz.com/posting-writing/
Thanks
Liz
Mam in introduction part if they mentioned in percentages, can we write that” units r measured in percentages” is it correct?
Thank you
You can write “Units are measured in percent”.
Liz
PLS CHECK IT…
The line graph illustrates the number of students who came to Australia from 6 different Asian countries (Japan,Hongkong,Korea,Singapore,Malaysia,Indonesia)over a period of 4 years from 1994 to 1997.
Overall,there was a steady raise in the number of Asian students from Indonesia,Malaysia,Hongkong and Singapore who came to Australia as compared to Korea and Japan which slumped over past 3 years.
Please read my notice: http://ieltsliz.com/posting-writing/
Liz
Dear liz mam,
As i am struggling with the time to paraphrase,can you give any particular suggestion for me?In fact,i aim at band score 7.
Please check the introduction
The line graph illustrates the number of foreign students,who were from six different countries,studied in Australia over 4 year period(1994 to 1997).
Sorry mam,i missed one info so i have corrected the intro.
“The line illustrates the number of Asian students,who were from six different countries,studied in Australia over 4 year period(1994 to 1997)”
Plz check it..
The provided line graph gives information about the Asian students from six different countries who came to study in Australia over the period of four years between 1994 and 1997.
It’s fine but you have not given the names of the countries. Your introduction should introduce the countries. Also check your grammar “the Asian students” should not have “the”. This is the first time we read about the students so you can’t use “the”.
All the best
Liz