IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Essay

Below is an example of a band score 9 IELTS writing task 2 model essay. The task is a direct questions essay which is quite common in IELTS. Read it carefully and pay attention to the structure of the essay, the linkers and the sentence structures.

Essay Question

Art is considered an important part of a society  as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?

Model Answer

It is commonly believed that art plays a fundamental role in society as artists are able to express their thoughts and their culture in their work. In my opinion, children should definitely learn art because they can develop creativity and learn to express themselves in their art work but it should not be taught to the detriment of other subjects.

Firstly, art is an essential subject which children, especially young children, should learn in order to help promote their creativity and imagination. Without the development of imagination and creative thinking, children will struggle to grow into dynamic, individual thinkers when they reach adulthood. Furthermore, some children are particularly gifted in their creative abilities and studying art can help them nurture their talents.

Another important advantage for children when practicing art is that it provides a medium through which they can express their emotions and feelings. In other words, young children do not have the linguistic capabilities to put their ideas into language and thus communicate directly. Therefore, by using art, they are able to convey meaning through pictures and symbols. For this reason, many child psychologists often study the art work of children to gain an insight into what they think and feel.

Finally, however, regardless of how useful the study of art is for children, this should not result in more focus being placed on art rather than other subjects. Children need to have a balance of all subjects so as to facilitate a healthy development both mentally and physically. Thus, ensuring that there is a healthy balance of art, sciences, languages and physical education in the school syllabus is essential.

In conclusion, while art certainly helps a child develop creativity as well as express their thoughts, it should be taught equally alongside all other subjects. A school curriculum should offer a balance of subjects.

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  1. Manjodh sandhu says:

    Hlo
    I want to know about writing that in the time of checking both writing task they count each and every word OR they do not count like is ,am ,are I am confused in word count for both the easy please mam please help me
    Please mam please help me

  2. Hamzakhan says:

    Hi Liz,
    I am preparing myself for general IELTS exam. Recently, I have started preparing myself for Task 2 writing but i am very confused because i can’t differentiate what are the academic and general IELTS essay. This section looks very difficult to me. I am too much worried and have fear in my mind that i won’t be able to score in this section. I need your special guidance for this task. You have given 20 common essay topic and each topic is further split into other topic. In addition you have given 100 essay question. This has made me confused. Please advise me what should i prepare for my general IELTS exam. Thanks

  3. Hi Liz
    Thanks for these awesome writing lessons.

    I am trying to copy the text to get the count of words but I think right click is disabled here and even Ctrl+F is not working. Can you please suggest how can I get it ?

    Thanks!

  4. thanks for your given extraordinory writing..
    i have a question related introduction and whole writing task 2 ….. can i use the word in intro like “history has wittnessed”, and ” scholars said that….” .. like these word can i impliment in intro. ..

  5. GHALIB ABU RUMMAN says:

    Hi,
    l would like to thank you for your great efforts and support to all IELTS students , l have one question , is it normal in the above essay ,that term Secondly is missing in the third paragraph.

    • Starting the first paragraph with Firstly, the second with Secondly, and the third with Thirdly, is considered mechanical and this is a characteristic of band score 6. So, be flexible.

  6. Wow! This essay is so good. How am I expected to write like this?? 🙁

  7. Thank you madam,
    Please, i am confused when to put personal examples on my essay paragraphs. I did notice you used none?

  8. Hi Liz. I’ve been reading your articles and watching all lecture videos here and I can say that I am a fan. I can’t deny that your materials are all helpful in preparation of my Ielts. I also noticed that you are trying your best to answer all the queries asked by most of the candidates. Eventhough you’ve mentioned that you’re not commenting on their essays, it seems that you still take the time to read, check and give your opinions and feedbacks regarding their written work. I’m not here to ask the same, fyi 😉 I just want to extend my gratitude for helping us without asking for any return. I’m just happy that people like you still do exist. Kudos!

  9. Hi Miss Liz…
    I would like to ask regarding the topic below:

    Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money should be spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree?

    I fully agree with the topic and my reason are
    1. There are crucial problems, which need to be addressed and funded right away, such as poverty, crimes, illiteracy and deteriorating public health, that the government faces.
    2. Only few people appreciate arts which makes it insensible to allot money for it.

    Do you think my reasons answered the task completely or did i deviate from the topic? I’m not really sure about my reasons ( body 1 and 2).
    Thanks Miss Liz. Godbless.

  10. T A Sheikh says:

    Hi. I have noticed reading your model essays that you don’t usually list examples into your body paragraphs. Some instructors suggest examples should be added in almost all of body paragraphs one writes. A relevant example could be of child art prodigy ‘Akiane’ in my view. Don’t you think by not using any examples , it can impede chances to achieve band 8 or band 9? At least , that’s my understanding after reading through countless blogs and going through online videos of other instructors. Kindly enlighten me with your views. Thanks

    • Examples are not necessary. Yes, you can use them. But it won’t impede your score not to. Examples can also take the form of giving examples of situations rather than data or statistics or individual examples.
      All the best
      Liz

  11. hi,liz
    can we state our opinion in ‘positive development or negative development’ essay.
    And while stating our opinion,where asked, in any type of essay what should be the arrangement of BPs.
    In agree disagree essay,the BP should be only according to our answer,e.g i agree ,so BP should all be in favor of agree?i am confused

  12. Hello
    I’ve noticed that you have never used a semicolon in your essays before. Is using semicolon instead of periods and commas in some sentences is better and gives more points?

    Thanks 🙂

  13. Dear Liz can you write a structure of Direct Essay? Thank you.

    • A direct essay is one where you are given specific questions to answer. On the whole, you have one body paragraph for each question.
      Liz

  14. hi Liz
    can you advise if this is okay?

    Q: artist have low salaries. Do you think the government should provide a buget for them to increase their salaries?

    Arts play an important role in our lives and artists should be compensated accordingly. However, in my opinion, the government should focus their budget more on critical issues in our society such as poverty, education and health. In this essay, I will discuss the importance of allocating the budget to these social problems.

    To begin with, the government should concentrate on issues that directly affects the people in the society. The public funds should spend to create jobs to unemployed, promote education by creating more schools and provide affordable hospitalization and medical programs to the poor. These are vital in order for the society to function. Ultimately, when these problems has been resolved, economy will prosper, thus, increasing the budget of the government.

    On the other hand, arts also generate income from entrace fees in the museum and art galleries. Some people enjoy arts and have financial capacity to spend money for arts. However, these does not warrant concrete reason for artists to get an increased on their salary.

    In conclusion, government should prioritize the allocation of the budget on the projects that directly affects people’s lives .

  15. Hi Liz,

    Just a question in the second paragraph. “children will struggle in grow into dynamic …..”

    or it should be children will struggle to grow into dynamic….

    Thank you.

  16. Hi Liz,

    Kindly peruse for me and advise accordingly.

    Q- Most people agree that money cannot buy happiness. Why is happiness difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness?

    Many share the view that money cannot purchase happiness. In my opinion, I believe that the definition of happiness poses a challenge because it is subjective however, happiness can be attained by applying a positive mindset to all areas of life.

    Defining happiness can be complicated because there is no precise definition and it varies from person to person. Some people, for example, obtain contentment from their achievements such as awards, purchase of a car or house, marriage and having a child, whereas others gain it from church, family and health. For instance, Selena Gomez, an American actress, singer and songwriter who has a net worth of eighteen million United States dollars was still not happy so turned to alcohol and drugs and ended up in rehab to save herself.

    Happiness is a state of mind which evokes positive thinking that cannot be measured by wealth. Being happy does not mean that everything is perfect, it means that the individual has decided to look beyond the imperfections and appreciate them. Take Tessanne Chin as an illustration, she is a popular Jamaican singer who is currently having marriage problems but, she has remained positive and channeled the positivity to her career. Today she has received many awards and is in the process of starting a new business with her sibblings.

    In conclusion, happiness is not determined by status symbols such as money or wealth and is defined differently by each person. Conversely, it can be accomplished by anyone through an optimistic viewpoint and positive outlook which are the basic essentials.

  17. Lyn francisco says:

    hi liz,, hope you take a look at this.. thanks

    Art being one of the essential contributor in the community and reflection of the culture is significant to impart to young children.In my opinion, a balance between the curriculum, which includes academic and non-academic subjects in learning must be followed.

    One factor which art can be an influence to a child’s development is by means of one’s craft, opinions and feelings can be mirrored. For children who are not vocally expressive can show their affections and emotions through their art. Another thing to consider is art culminates child’s imagination and creativity that can be a doorstep for their common future interest, leading to be someone in their own generation.

    On the other hand, focusing on art alone cannot maximized the potential of the children. Other subjects such as Math, Computer and Science are fundamental in relation to everyday life.Those who perform better in academic subjects but has no interest in art will be affected and perhaps limit their life options, which sometimes leads to failure. A balance between the subjects in school is much more important for children’s development without being physically pressured and mentally tortured.

    To sum it up, art is an effective way of self expression and basically important to be taught to children, but limiting the scope of knowledge into it can hinder the growth of those young people for future possibilities.

    • You have presented relevant ideas and answered the questions. However, you are trying to over complicate your language and as a result you are producing too many errors. This number of errors will reduce your score. Your aim should be to produce accurate language not trying to impress the examiner.
      http://ieltsliz.com/rules-for-posting-writing/
      All the best
      Liz

      • Lyn francisco says:

        thank you Liz, i really appreciate it. If it is not too much to ask, may i know which part of the essay seems to be complicated,. Thank you very much and God bless you,..

        • I was referring to your grammar structures. Your grammar contains errors – try to produce accurate sentences rather than trying to impress the examiner with complicated grammar. Aim for accuracy. Work on your grammar to avoid errors.
          Liz

  18. Hi Liz,

    Kindly review the following and provide feedback.

    Q – News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is the news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should news focus on good news instead?

    News plays a vital role in the lives of many. In my opinion, news is important to people as it keeps them abreast with current happenings, however most headlines portray negative news because it intrigues most person but harms society so, I therefore believe that reporters and journalists should spotlight more good news instead.

    Thank you.

    • The ideas are fine. However, it would be better to divide your thesis statement into two sentences to get more control over the grammar. Also you need to work on your English vocabulary “current happenings = current events.
      Liz

  19. Paramjeet Singh Dhunna says:

    Hii Liz
    I am an IELTS trainer.I am following your videos a nd other tips related with all modules,and these are proving very useful for my students.I really appreciate your work.

  20. Thanks for your help during my exam preparation.

  21. vijaya laxmi says:

    Hello,
    I have a problem in vocabulary though I’m practicing still no satisfaction
    I ‘ll have content but couldn’t present it properly
    Plz give me some tips.

    • Hi,

      The only way to develop your vocabulary and accuracy is to go through comment vocabulary you know and check the exact meaning and usage in a comprehensive dictionary. It is time consuming and slow but it is the only way. IELTS is testing the accuracy of your vocabulary as well as your range.
      All the best
      Liz

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