IELTS Essay Ideas: Banning Mobile Phones

A recent essay question reported on Jan 31:

Some people think that the use of mobiles (cell) phones should be banned in public places such a in libraries and shop and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Ideas

Reasons for Banning Mobile Phones in Public Places

  • Phones can be intrusive. (uninvited noise to others)
  • Phones can disturb others when they are concentrating, for example in a library.
  • They are antisocial as people are too busy sending messages to talk to the people in front of them, for example in a shop when they are being served.
  • The signal can cause problems in some public places, such as hospitals, by interfering with delicate instruments or equipment.
  • In some public place, such as libraries, music halls or galleries, phones can annoy and ruin the experience for others.

Reasons for Not Banning Mobiles Phones in Public Places

  • Mobiles do not need to be intrusive as they can easily be turned to silent or vibrate.
  • Phones can be useful in case of emergencies, for instance accidents in public places.
  • Phones can provide entertainment when travelling on tedious journeys, particularly on public transport.
  • Phones are multi-functional and can be used as recording devices or cameras so shouldn’t be banned in public.
  • They are useful for families overseas to get in touch with each other.
  • They provide a safety for youngsters as parents can easily get in touch with them wherever they are.

Concessions

  • mobile phones should be banned in places where they interfere with equipment, interrupt a service or break rules, such as in a library, but in all other public places they should be allowed as long as they are used with respect to others

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Please note that some of the above ideas are not connected to the exact essay question (for example, they include ideas about banning phones in hospitals or museums – these are ideas just to help you with the general topic rather than the exact essay question)

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  1. Hi dear Liz I am Dilya I would be appreciate you if you check my essay and tell me the band.
    Some people think that the use mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. To what extand do you agree or disagree with this statement?

    It is true that using mobile phones in public places have become rampant over the last few decades.Althoug some people believe that using mobile phones is not allowed in public places.Iagree this. In this essay I am going to explain why I think that using mobile phones should be banned in public places with several reasons.

    To begin with,using mobile phones in public places brougt negative effects in people’s life for example , while people drining a car and talking on the phone or listening to music from mobile phones they can not concentrate onthe road. As a result they face-toface car accedents and get bad injured or may be diet. Futhermore , in the library, when your cell phone rings or you speak in a loud voice you may obstacle, annoyed people who are sitting near to you and reading.

    however, having cell phones helped people to communicate with other people faster, cheaper and more comfortable. In general, in the shop you can easy calculate you food which you bought from the shop.
    To conclude, althoug, using mobile phones is not allowed in some public places but I believe that it impacted on the way people spend their time.

  2. It’s enormous that you are getting ideas from this post as well as from our dialogue made here.

  3. Gurpreet Sidhu says:

    Hi Liz….can you please rate my essay? I would appreciate greatly if you do that, so please….
    some people think that the use of mobile phones should be banned in public places such as in libraries, shops and on public transport. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? write at least 250 words.

    It is suggested that there should be a complete restriction on using cell phones in public places where they turn into disruptive tools. Personally, I believe that they should not be banned unless they do not cause any interruption or interference in service or equipment.

    On the one hand, i accept that mobiles may interfere with the ambiance of certain of places. In libraries, for example, they can be intrusive or noisy, which can break concentration of others. This is because these places are usually calm, where people visit to read or relax. So, phones can easily annoy others or ruin their experience in these quiet places. Similarly, mobile signals can cause problems in some frequently used places such as hospitals by interfering with delicate instruments. These can lead to malfunctioning of a range of devices such as ventilators, echocardiographs and computers. Therefore, the use of mobile phones should be restricted in these buildings o cases.

    However, I believe that mobiles should not be prohibited in the all public places. The mobile may not be only be effective in extreme situations, but also an entertaining one. This can be used in case of emergencies such as accidents at public places. At that time, it could help in contacting to the ambulance, police or relatives. Furthermore, this is a great tool to eliminate monotony while travelling on public transport as it is a multi-functioned device. One can talk or chat with their near ones, listen to songs, surf the internet, use cameras, and so on.

    In conclusion, while use of cell-phones can be limited in some areas of public places where they cause disturbance in other devices or services, in my opinion they should be allowed in rest of the places as they may help in dangerous situations and provide entertainment.

  4. navneet says:

    Hi Liz,

    Please check my work, I need 7 in writing.

    It is often argued by some masses that cell phones should be prohibited in common places such as libraries, shops and public places. Although I agree that phones should be banned in certain places, I disagree with their strict prohibition in such public places.

    To begin with, an argument put forward in favor of banning mobile phones has plethora of reasons. Firstly, unrestricted use of phones in certain places can be intrusive to others comfort. For instance, in libraries, phones usually distract the concentration of readers. In addition to this, phones can annoy and cause nuisance exploiting the experience of others while travelling by interacting loudly on phones. Lastly, phones can act as unethical devices in some situations.Take shops as an example, when people are busy sending texts rather than addressing to seller in front of them.

    However, there are adequate number of reasons why cellular phones should not be restricted in some local sites. First and foremost, phones are highly functional devices in case of emergencies such as collisions. Thus, it is easier to seek medical aid through phones. Furthermore, phones can be beneficial in tedious journeys as these are great sources of entertainment. Mobile phones are multi-functional and can be utilized to record videos and click pictures. This can be helpful to record illegal acts and violence and hence can deter culprits to re-offend. Finally, cell phones have made overseas communication convenient even in public places. Therefore, cell phones provide myriad of benefits and should be permitted in ethical circumstances.

    In conclusion, there are convincing arguments for both viewpoints of the statement. I believe that the mobile phones should be banned in public places where they interrupt services or break rules. However, in all other places they should be allowed as long as they are used with respect to others.

  5. Hi Liza, can you please provide me with your feedback.

    It is argued that moblie phones should be barred in some public areas. Personally, I strongly agree with thsi idea due to moral and technical resons.

    It is morally unacceptable to intrude others comfort. The uses of handspones could disturb people around us and thus make them feel stressed and irritated. This is commonly seen in communal places such as public transport, restaurants and other leisure venues. For instance, I remember recently when I commuted to work by train, there was a man sitting next to me who used his phone constantly and made called loudly without attention to other passangers. This made people compalin and a sfatff member had to ask him to either terminate the call or leave the coach immediatly.

    Furthermore, there is also technical issue behind prohibiting cellualr phones in special buildings, for example, hospital. This is because mobile signals could interfere with some some equipments and possible damage could resulted from this. A good example is, the Echocardiograph which is an instrument uses to diagnised heard diseases, could have a significant error when there is conflict between the mobile frequencies with its function. This may lead to misdiagnosis and interruption of the medical proceedure. Therefore, its very common to see a warning sign in clinics requesting the visitors and the patients to switch the mobile phone of while they attending to the hospital.

    In conclusion, I support the plans to restrict the use of the cellular phones in public premises.

    • Avoid writing about yourself. You should give explains of people in general. Also think more carefully about how to support your arguments with strong ideas. Your second body paragraph has stronger ideas than the first. Be careful going too deeply into medical terminology when the actual topic is technology and society. This gives the impression you are a doctor and the only language you know well is medical language – being able to write two strong sentences with medical language will not give you a higher band score when the rest of your essay uses lower level language. Also check your grammar (plurals, articles) and vocabulary.
      http://ieltsliz.com/rules-for-posting-writing/
      All the best
      Liz

  6. mustafa mhawi says:

    its considered by some that mobile phones must be prohibited in public places such as in shops ,libraries ,and public transportation system.
    in my opinion mobile phone devices should not be inhibited in general places.
    on the one hand using mobile phone to make a call in public places for example ,the libraries,sites in which the reader need to focus on their reading can be annoying and distrubing to other,moreover phones are emitting electrical signals which may have damaging effect on human health and also these signal may interfere with other devices.
    in addition to this the people who make calls in public places can not take their privacy as most of people still listening to their speech.
    on the other hand phone calls nowadays is critical to a lot of people such as those whom most of their jobs are done by telecommunication, another things that make the phone devices indispensable in modern life are the invention of smart phone technologies which makes the phone multifunctional and being more than just a device used for calling, for example most of poeple using social networks to communicate with each other as facebook,twitter etc, and that is made be possible by using phone as its portable and easy to use,another importance of phones is that their usefulness in emergency situations when someone needs a help
    in conclusion the phones are simllar to other devices that the human create and its depend on moral of person and the way he use , and in my point of view phone devices should not be prohibited in public places.

    hi miss liz first of all there is no word to reward and appreciete your web site and unexceptional patient with your student
    second i am gonna to ask you favour to assess my passsage according to the following points
    1.grammer and terms that i used (is it academic or not)
    2.my opinion was clear but i also mentioned the disadvantegs in first paragraph …is this possible? i mean am i acheived task response or not?
    3.please score it ,,,its first time for me to write and also notify me to my weakest points(ignore the punctution)

    thank you so much

    • There are serious problems with punctuation and paragraphing which makes it difficult to give any further comments. I suggest your work on your punctuation and learn how many paragraphs there should be in an IELTS essay.
      Also, please read the rules for posting writing on my blog: http://ieltsliz.com/rules-for-posting-writing/
      All the best
      Liz

      • mustafa mhawi says:

        hi liz excuse me because i didnt read the rules for posting a comment on your pages i am really apologize for the mistake that i made.
        please can you be more clear about how many paragraph it should be? i thought there should be (introduction,opinion,first,second paragraph,and conclusion)
        thank you for your time

  7. Hi Liz,
    I have an inquiry regarding your sentence. You mentioned “easily be turned to silent and vibrate”. Could it be like this ” easily turned on silent and vibrate mode’ or ‘on silent and vibrate’.
    ‘to’ looks very odd to me, however, you are an expert, please correct me, thanks.

    • It’s possible to have this sentence with or without the word “mode”.
      All the best
      Liz

    • PhuongShine says:

      hi Liz, please check my writing, i am a beginner here.
      My target is 6,5.
      Please tell me how can i get it? thanks in advance.
      here my essay:
      it is true that mobiles(cell) phones should be prohibited in general places such a libraries and shop and on public transport. I completely agree with this idea because of some the following reasons.

      Firstly, Phones can annoy others when they are concentrating. This is because of its constant ringtones or the phone conservation might disturb and ruin the experience of people, for instance, a student who studies in library can easily focus on his study without using mobiles rather than he brings it there. Secondly, signal of mobile phone can cause serious problems in some public places such as hospital by interfering with delicate instruments or equipment. For example, any patient wears implanted device, cell phone can interfere with it and it could be stopped completely.
      In conclusion, i definitely accept that mobiles should be prohibited.

  8. Hi Liz, I`d appreciate it if you could share your comments about my writing task.
    Cheers!!

    I strongly believe that there should be no attempts to prevent anyone from using mobile phones in public sites. Not only would this mean a breach of the core rights of individuals, but it could also cause an emergency situation to be neglected.
    Centuries of fights culminated in a free society, where people have their basic rights, such as talking on the phone or texting their loved ones, guaranteed by the state. Hence, were any policy against individual freedom of choice put into action, our civilisation would be moving several steps backwards. Obviously, it is expected that each one show their respect towards others while using their handsets, but by no means should they be forbidden to do so. History is full of such foolish ventures, and the results have constantly shown that this is the wrong way to go.
    Moreover, those who stand up for the band turn a blind eye to potential emergencies or unexpected situations. Five years ago, I was in a 5 hour long train journey, when my grandfather had a serious domestic accident. Fortunately, I was able to receive a call straight away and take timely measures. However, had I not picked up my phone immediately, the outcome could have been tragic. In other words, communicating while on the go is a feature enabled by technology, which has made peoples` lives much easier and safer. There is no reason to go back in time and ignore the benefits from this.
    To sum up, any civilised debate is healthy and people are entitled to share their opinions and suggestions about a whole range of topics. Nevertheless, when it comes to communication and, ocnsequently, to individual freedom, the community in general should think not twice, but three times, before adopting any measure to curb it.

  9. Hi Liz , Hope you are fine . Sorry to disturb you again . Please check my writing and tell me how much I deserve as well as about my mistake.

    The contribution of advancement of technology is inevitable and the communication sector has experienced tremendous development .Mobile phone is amazing invention of science . Now a days this device is indeed valuable and handy . The need of cell phone is undeniable and it has great importance . Almost 100% people of earth use this.
    Though it has innumerable uses in our life, sometimes it becomes nuisance. The exercise of this gadget in past is only limited to receive and call the contact but now it has vast implication . The function has been increased such as internet surfing, camera etc.
    However , some public places has restricted the use of mobile phone . i simply oppose to this.Completely banning the mobile phone in public areas is not a good idea rather this decision has deprived human rights . We never know when an emergency could occur and in that time mobile would be a safeguard. For instance , when individual are accessible with device , information about theft and death can be conveyed to the individual.
    In contrast , in some cases indiscriminate use of mobile phone has become a serious concern as people speak loudly, hampered the privacy of others.
    Although we are concerned about the misuse , most people are aware of the public behavior . They can talk softly and moved to corner . In this case silent mood can likely be a solution .
    To conclude that, there are few things in the world which do not have two side effects of implication .In this circumstances banning the use of mobile cannot be wise decision . To lessen the problem awareness can be increased among the people . Creating and effective rules to use cell phone could be difference.

    Best regards
    Sony

    • Hi Sony,

      I only have time to give you one comment. This essay is about banning mobile phones in public. The instructions ask if you agree with this. Where is your answer? Please watch my free video lesson about writing an introduction for an opinion essay. You need to learn how to give your answer directly in the introduction.
      All the best
      Liz

  10. Hi Liz,
    this is my essay, could you give me some comment to improve it, many thanks!
    Some people believe that using cell phones in the public areas can cause plenty of disadvantages and therefore should not be allowed, I disagree with this view because of a couple of reasons.
    Firstly, mobile phones are muti-functional devices with various vital functions. Together with the development of technology, a cell phone can be a smart storage device with hundreds of pictures, videos or thousands of e-books. Nowaday cell phone holders can search information for work, or relax by watching films and listening to music whenever and wherever they wish. Futhermore, using applications on a cell phone could help you find the way to any place without being lost , even find hotels or restaurant when you travel.
    Secondly, mobile phones are useful in emergency situations. 5 years ago, when I was going out with my friends, I had a serious car accident. I was faint away for a long time. My friends had no way but using my cell phone to contact with my family and called for the ambulance. It is clear that mobile phone could be a helpful and valuable device not only in the road casuaties but in other difficult circumstances such as fires , crimes.
    To sum up, with the above mentioned functions, I believe that people should have the right to be free in using their phones in public places.

    • Hi Lien,

      There are some issues with this essay. The most obvious is that it is under words – only 226 words.

      1. Answer the questions – each body paragraph must explain one reason why you think mobile phones should not be banned. You can’t only write why mobile phones are useful – explain why they should not be banned in each body paragraph.
      2. Learn how to write a full introduction with two clear statements: http://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-2-how-to-write-an-introduction/
      3. Don’t give examples about yourself. Here’s an example about how to change examples and write them correctly “5 years ago, when I was going out with my friends, I had a serious car accident. I was faint away for a long time. My friends had no way but using my cell phone to contact with my family and called for the ambulance.” = “For example, if a person has a serious accident and someone nearby has a mobile phone, they will be able to call for help promptly. This could save a persons live which would be impossible if mobile phones were banned.”

      You’ll need to practice developing your ideas and giving appropriate language. It is essential to wrote over 250 words or you will get a low score.
      All the best
      Liz

      • Many thanks for your comments, Liz.
        That’s really helpful for me !

      • Hi Mam
        Sorry for proofreading…
        1. The most obvious one is…..
        2. And call for ambulance….
        3. He/she will be able to call for help…..
        4. Save a person’s life…
        5. You will need to practise…
        6. Essential to write over 250 words…

        Thanks a lot…

  11. Hi Liz,

    I am doing the general exam. Is there a difference in the marking schemes?

  12. Hi, Liz!
    As per your suggestion, i have rewritten it… Please do appraise and suggest me

    Some people think that the use of mobile (cell) phone should be banned in public places, such as: in libraries, shop and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

    It is considered by many people that mobile phones should not be allowed in public places, like libraries, shops and transport. Despite its negative effects, it has some inevitable roles that cannot be overlooked.
    I opine my disagreement with the statement in the following paragraphs.

    Cell phone has contributed a lot in many ways. One of the most significant aspects is that it is very convenient owing to its portability. It has different size and shapes. So, it can be taken anywhere with ease. Similarly, it is the granary of knowledge. It is very useful for people to search everything whatever they want. For example, in the library, if we do not find the book which we long to read, we can easily surf internet through mobile and read that.

    Another thing is that, mobile can be an impressive mode of recreation which assists to reduce our monotonousness on a long journey since it has lots of functions, such as medial player to listen to songs, video to watch films, games to play.

    Finally, cell phone is a source of quick communication which is very useful to covey our message. For instance, if I we are in urgent need or if something goes wrong in our surrounding, such as: accident or kidnapping, it is the easiest means to inform the police or call an ambulance.

    To summarize, cell phone, a multifunctional device, is more informative and entertaining which has benefited us in every walk with its abundant of facilities. I, therefore, believe that we should use it acknowledging the requirement instead of banning and making it an issue.

    • Hi,

      The paragraphs are clearer – please see my previous comments.
      Liz

      • Thank you very much for your cooperation!
        Are the essays of Academic and General similar?

        • The GT essay questions are slightly easier and less complex but the method of approaching them is exactly the same.
          Regards
          Liz

        • Hi Liz,

          Thanks for the response.

          On a separate note, I am sitting the general exam. Is there a difference in the marking schemes? How different are they for Task 2?

          • Hi,

            The marking criteria and scoring is the same for writing task 2 GT and academic paper. It’s different for task 1 writing (only for task achievement) and for reading.
            All the best
            Liz

  13. Hany El Masry says:

    Hi liz ,
    hope you are well . Thanks so much for your great efforts . Appreciate if you could score that essay . Thanks again . Eagerly waiting for your reply .
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    It is thought that using cell phones in public places have become a hazard and therefore should be banned . While I agree to to some extent with this notion .I think that cell phones have become one of the compelling necessities for people . Personally , i believe that banning them could have a detrimental impact on people for a couple of reasons .

    Firstly , cell phones have proved to be a lifebuoy in critical times as fires , crimes and road casualities . An example illustrating this in action is United States Civil Defense recent reports which indicate that most emergency calls notifying about fires have been received from cell phones , from people passing by fires in streets . Not only that , but many road casualities have been rescued thanks to calls from cell phones as well . Further and even more importantly , though , most of crimes have been either prevented or authenticated due to the prompt use off cell phones .

    Secondly , cell phones are no longer used for making or receiving calls only , but for various indispensible functions as well . For example , a single cell phone device can serve as a portable library teeming with thousands of e-books . As a result , cell phone holders can browse many books anywhere and anytime . Equally importantly , though , cell phone can function as a navigator , leading or guiding its holder to any place they want to reach without being lost .

    In conclusion , i believe that cell phones function more beyond being being a source of nuisance as it is alleged by some . They have become intrinsic component of peoples lives and there for should not be prohibited in public places .

    • Hi,

      This is a very good, well written essay. Well done! You have addressed the task and given an opinion. Your main points are well supported and developed. Your grammar is complex and mostly accurate. Your vocabulary is flexible and you are able to give precision in meaning. You have the potential to get band 8 but only if you work on your weaknesses. I’ve listed some below.

      One point to consider for improvement. Take a look at your conclusion: ” should not be prohibited in public places .” This statement provides a very clear opinion and position. That is what you should be doing in your introduction. In your introduction, don’t write “While I agree to to some extent with this notion…” because it is completely irrelevant and confusing for the reader. This essay completely disagrees and that should be made 100% clear in the introduction without any other confusing information. Decide your opinion and give it clearly.

      Another point to check is your linking “and there for should not be prohibited in public places” = “and, therefore, should not be ….” Make sure you read back through your essay to get rid of any small errors. Another linking error can be found here: “in critical times as fires , crimes and road casualities”. Using “as” for a linking device is not for examples. You should have used “such as”.

      Grammar: “using cell phones in public places have …” the subject is not “cell phones” plural, it is “using cell phones in public places..” and is singular. When you use a gerund as a noun it will be singular.

      Well done! You should be proud of this essay and I’m sure you can easily fix your weaknesses to do very well.
      Regards
      Liz

      • Hani Shaker says:

        Thnxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much Liz
        Really ,iam soproud of your comments that really encourage and urge me towards perfect essay writing .

        I greatly appreciate your help and words fail to express due gratitude to you .
        Thanks again
        Hani Shaker

  14. Hi, Liz!
    Please appraise the essay and tell me the band.

    Some people think that the use of mobile (cell) phone should be banned in public places, such as: in libraries, shop and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
    It is considered by many people that mobile phones should not be allowed in public places, like libraries, shops and transport. Despite its negative effects, in my opinion, it has some inevitable roles that cannot be overlooked.
    Let me clarify why cell phones should be prohibited in public areas. Firstly, it turns out to be a great hindrance in the library where a pin drop silence is sine quo non to grasp the subjective knowledge. In other words, library is the place where people go to accumulate information and knowledge. In this case, a ring tone and a verbal conversation made by people can distract the attention. Secondly, cell phone can be a source of irritation. For instance, a crowd of people are found in shops or on public transport with their different purposes. If everybody begins to talk, send messages and listen to songs, it will definitely disturb others. Moreover, the over use of mobile creates a negative impact.
    However, cell phone, a portable device, has contributed a lot in many ways. One of the most significant aspects is that it is very convenient. It is the granary of knowledge. It is very useful for people to search everything whatever they want. For example, in the library, if we do not find the book which we long to read, we can easily surf internet through mobile and read that. Another thing is that, mobile can be an impressive mode of recreation which assists to reduce our monotonous on a long journey. If something goes wrong, such as: accident or kidnapping, it is the easiest means to inform the police or call an ambulance.
    To summarize, although cell phone, a multifunctional device, is more informative and entertaining, it creates a negative impression. I, therefore, believe that it should be used acknowledging the requirement.

    • Hi,

      I think you need to review your vocabulary and language for academic writing.

      “Let me clarify why” this is not academic or formal.
      “it turns out to be” – this is not academic or formal.
      “sine quo non to grasp” – don’t use this in an English language test.

      Your body paragraphs show a discussion essay not an opinion essay. What is your opinion? A balanced view doesn’t mean you agree with both sides. In fact you have more arguments against the use of mobile phones than for the use of them. You state in your essay “Let me clarify why cell phones should be prohibited in public areas.” – is this your view? This statement says that you believe they should be prohibited but other paragraphs say the opposite. You can’t put contrasting opinions in an opinion essay. Have a clear view and make sure that every sentence concurs with that opinion.

      On the whole, this is a confusing essay with no clear opinion. The examiner will reduce your score in task response. You have good paragraphing but supporting points are linked enough. Your grammar is quire good and some of your vocabulary is also good. You have the potential to get band 7 but not with this essay.
      Work on your weaknesses.
      All the best
      Liz

      • Thank you very much Liz for your inspiration suggestion!
        could you make clear regarding the agreement and disagreement of an essay?
        Can we not address both sides?

        • Hi,

          You cannot discuss both sides in an opinion essay equally. Firstly, this is not a discussion essay, it is an essay where you must have a clear opinion to get a good score. Secondly, you can’t have an opinion which is “I agree and disagree”. However, it is possible to have a balanced opinion (where you partly agree with the statement) but remember it is not a discussion and your opinion must be very clear.
          Regards
          Liz

    • Hi! Liz!
      As per your suggestion, i have tried to write it again . Please appraise it and suggest band
      Some people think that the use of mobile (cell) phone should be banned in public places, such as: in libraries, shop and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

      It is considered by many people that mobile phones should not be allowed in public places, like libraries, shops and transport. Despite its negative effects, it has some inevitable roles that cannot be overlooked.
      I opine my disagreement with the statement in the following paragraphs.

      Cell phone has contributed a lot in many ways. One of the most significant aspects is that it is very convenient owing to its portability. It has different size and shapes. So, it can be taken anywhere with ease. Similarly, it is the granary of knowledge. It is very useful for people to search everything whatever they want. For example, in the library, if we do not find the book which we long to read, we can easily surf internet through mobile and read that.
      Another thing is that, mobile can be an impressive mode of recreation which assists to reduce our monotonousness on a long journey since it has lots of functions, such as medial player to listen to songs, video to watch films, games to play.
      Finally, cell phone is a source of quick communication which is very useful to covey our message. For instance, if I we are in urgent need or if something goes wrong in our surrounding, such as: accident or kidnapping, it is the easiest means to inform the police or call an ambulance.
      To summarize, cell phone, a multifunctional device, is more informative and entertaining which has benefited us in every walk with its abundant of facilities. I, therefore, believe that we should use it acknowledging the requirement instead of banning and making it an issue.

      • Hi,

        This is certainly better. You might get a band 6.5 or 7 with this essay. Here is more feedback:

        Your introduction is still not written clearly enough. Don’t try to be complex with your thesis statement. Just make it clear “In my opinion, I disagree that mobile phones should be prohibited in public places…”. You don’t need to write about “the statement in the following paragraphs”.

        Your first body paragraph is slightly confusing with the first sentences “Cell phone has contributed a lot in many ways. One of the most significant aspects is that it is very convenient owing to its portability. It has different size and shapes. So, it can be taken anywhere with ease.” This is all about the advantages of mobiles not about why they should not be banned. Put your main point in your topic sentences.

        Your second body paragraph is under-developed. Each main point is in one body paragraph and each is equally developed. Or do you have three body paragraphs? I can’t see clearly.

        There is still a problem with some non academic language. “thing” is not academic. Also don’t refer to “we” or “our”. Write in third person plural.

        All the best
        Liz

  15. The use of mobile phones in public places have become rampant over recent decades. Although some people believe that using cell phones in public places should be prohibited, I do not agree that it should be for several reasons which will be discussed in this essay.

    Firstly, the multi-functionality of mobile phones has made them become a necessary accessory for many persons throughout the world today. They can be used to send and check email, do research and even study. For instance, while people are waiting or in their spare time they can study for IELTS exam with IELTS applications downloaded from playstore. Additionally, cell phones can be used as a camcorder or voice recorder to capture special moments. Furthermore, mobile phones can also be used as a navigation device to help drivers to navigate the roadways.

    Secondly, having a cell phone in an emergency saves time and lives. For example if someone met in a motor vehicle accident they can be used to contact wrecking service, police, ambulance, fire station, as well as capture pertinent details such as picture of license plate and even dented vehicle.

    Finally, the use of mobile phones on public transport eradicates monotony during long journeys. They provide entertainment as one is able to watch movies, videos, play games, listen to music and take pictures of scenery.

    To conclude, with the diverse functions of cell phones, saving time and lives, and providing entertainment without being intrusive, I believe that people should be at liberty to use their phones wherever and whenever they want.

    • Hi,

      It’s a good essay. You have addressed the task fully and given a clear, well supported opinion. You also have good English. However, there is a downside. Two in fact. Unfortunately, your linking needs work. At present, it would be labelled as “mechanical” and this means each linking word is used like a machine without flexibility. This means it is band score 6 for linking. It is mechanical because you start each sentence with a linker. Firstly, …. / For instance, …. / Additionally, … / Furthermore, …/ Secondly, …./ For example, …./ Finally, …. You need to be more flexible and not always put your linkers at the start of sentences.

      The other issue is that not all your main points are well developed. The first one is, the second is supported a little and the third one is not developed. In writing task 2, each body paragraph should be equally well supported and that means the same length. You get a high score for supporting and developing ideas. So, work on extending your main points equally with supporting ideas.

      All the best
      Liz

      • Thank you for the prompt response and feedback. However, I thought that using linkers at the beginning of each sentence would make my essay more cohesive. I will definately work on my weak areas.

        • Hi,

          It certainly makes it coherent. However, they shouldn’t be used mechanically and they shouldn’t be overused. They must be used flexibly for the higher scores in coherence and cohesion.
          Regards
          Liz

          • The use of mobile phones in public places has become rampant over recent decades. Although some people believe that cell phone usage in public places should be prohibited, I do not agree that it should be for several reasons which will be discussed in this essay.

            Firstly, the multi-functionality of mobile phones has made them a necessary accessory for many persons throughout the world today. They can be used to send and check email, do research and even study. For instance, while people are waiting or in their spare time they can study for IELTS exam with IELTS applications downloaded from playstore or ebooks.

            Furthermore, having a cell phone in an emergency saves time and lives. Accidents and emergencies are unpredictable but with a mobile phone to the rescue, there will be no need for a panic attack. If someone met in a motor vehicle accident for example, they can be used to contact the wrecking service, police, ambulance and fire station, as well as capture pertinent details such as a picture of license plate, third-party documents or the damaged vehicles.

            The use of mobile phones on public transport can also eradicate monotony during long journeys. Today, one can video record or take a photo of happenings to capture the moment. In this technologically advanced era, one can also watch videos and movies, play games and and keep abreast with social media happenings to keep themselves entertained.

            In conclusion, with the diverse functions of cell phones, its power to save time and lives and to provide entertainment for its users, I do not think it should be prohibited. People should be at liberty to use them wherever and whenever they wish.

            • Hi Diana,

              Well done! It’s a great essay. Your opinion is very clearly given and each main points supports your opinion. You have also done well extending your ideas. Your linking is natural and flexible. Your vocabulary and grammar show a good range with accuracy. Certainly a band 8 – possibly more.

              My only comment would be to avoid using IELTS as an example. It might not affect your score but it would be better to choose another example. Don’t forget we write about “the IELTS exam” – you need the article “the”.
              All the best
              Liz

  16. Thanks for your comments. Your point make sense ..

    So if i understand correctly, if give my introductory opinion that mobile phones should be restricted to an extent that will help public. should suffice my para 1 and para 2 and conclusion. Please clarify.

    Or If i still stick to my original introduction. para1 and para2 should support it and should conclude with same opinion…

    Thanks in advance for gauging my approach…

    • Hi,

      The best way for me to explain is that when you write your opinion in the introduction paragraph, then each paragraph must give an explanation to support your opinion. So, before you write each paragraph, say to yourself “in this paragraph I will show support for my opinion by giving X as a main point.”. If you do that, you will be fine.

      If your opinion is that the use of mobiles should be restricted but not banned, then you can explain why they should not be completely banned and you can explain what restrictions you think there should be. Each paragraph will support your opinion.
      All the best
      Liz

  17. Hi Liz,

    Please peruse my introduction attempt below and provide some feedback. Thanks much.

    The use of mobile phones in public places has become rampant over recent decades. Some people are of the opinion that mobile phone usage in public places should be banned. In my opinion, I strongly disagree that public usage of mobile phones should be banned for several reasons which will be discussed in this essay.

    • Hi,

      You’ve got the right technique. This introduction introduces the topic and issue very well in the background statement and your thesis statement gives a very clear opinion – well done!
      Liz

      • Thank you for the feedback but my main concern was repeating mobile phones and usage. Does it make my vocabulary seems limited?

        • Hi,

          It is normal that some words will be repeated. You can write about mobile phones or cell phones but that’s about it. Those words will be repeated. To write about the usage of mobile phones, you can write about using mobile phone or the use of mobile phones but again that is all. You will need to repeat words. By changing from “usage” to “the use of” to “using …” already shows the skill of paraphrasing and adapting language which is all the examiner needs to see. Also when you write about the use of mobile phones, in the next sentence you will write “this should be avoided because…” so you avoid repeating the word by referencing using “this”. If you take a look at some of my model essays, you will see words repeated and the use of referencing.
          All the best
          Liz

  18. It is true that mobile phones are the one of the major reasons of noise pollution in public areas. While I accept that there are some drawbacks to this technology, in my opinion, I believe levying a complete ban would not be an appropriate answer.

    On the one hand, there are two compelling grounds to impose an entire ban on using cell phones in public areas. One principle reason is that, mobile phones can be intrusive. In other words, these phones can cause some serious disturbance and people may find hard to concentrate while performing important tasks at their workplaces. Likewise, the phone signals can also cause some serious complications in some public places such as hospitals by interfering with delicate instruments or equipment. It is, therefore, fairly easy to understand why some people demand restricting mobile phones in certain places.

    On the other hand, there are also two valid points to prove that imposing a full ban on mobile phones usage would be unfair to its users. Firstly, this communication technology has become one of the basic necessities of day to day life and a vital source not only for keeping in touch with friends and family but also many businesses are done over the phone nowadays. Secondly, phones can even save people’s lives, especially in a case of an accident or if someone suffers from sudden hearts attack while shopping. Banning mobile phone in public places would, therefore, not be a justifiable solution.

    In conclusion, although, using mobile phones in public places can have some negative consequences, yet, I disagree with the idea of banning them fully, as this would clearly be an unjustifiable explanation to its users.

    • Hi,

      Thanks for your essay. You write very nicely. However, one point of concern is that this is an opinion essay and your opinion is that you think there should not be a complete ban on the use of mobile phones. This means that each body paragraph should contain reasons why you believe there should not be a complete ban. Your body paragraphs do not contain this. Instead you have written a opinion essay introduction with discussion essay body paragraphs. This could be a problem in IELTS. In each body paragraph you should explain and support your opinion.
      All the best
      Liz

      • thanks for you response liz, i was trying to write a balance essay, partially supporting both views, as i mentioned in introduction that ” While i accept that there are some drawbacks and i also believe that a complete ban would not be the right option

        so is it better to avoid writing balance opinion essays ?

        thanks again for your time.

        • hi Liz, sorry for bothering you again. What you have suggested definitely makes sense , but my understanding is that the body paragraphs should follow the introduction(may be i am approaching opinion essays totally wrong). Please guide me on following opinion essay introductions.

          Introduction when I disagree banning mobile phones in public areas.

          It is true that mobile phones are the one of the major reasons of noise pollution in public areas. In my opinion, I believe levying a complete ban would not be an appropriate answer.

          Introduction when I agree banning mobile phones in public areas.

          It is true that mobile phones are the one of the major reasons of noise pollution in public areas., in my opinion, I believe levying a complete ban would be an appropriate answer.

          Introduction when I have a balance opinion.

          It is true that mobile phones are the one of the major reasons of noise pollution in public areas. While I accept that there are some drawbacks to this technology, in my opinion, I believe levying a complete ban would not be an appropriate answer.

          • Hi,

            The problem was not your introduction. You wrote a clear opinion essay introduction. The problem was your body paragraphs. When you have an opinion essay, each body paragraph supports your view – there is no other information give in the whole essay – only reasons for your view.

            You have written that “I believe levying a complete ban would not be an appropriate answer” but in your first body paragraph you write the opposite “there are two compelling grounds to impose an entire ban “. This means you are not presenting a clear position throughout your essay. You give one view in the introduction but a different view in the body.

            So, this is all about the language you use and the way you present it. To present a balanced view, you can’t write I think a complete ban is wrong and then explain in the body reasons why a complete ban is good. However, you can say in the introduction that you don’t believe in a complete ban and then in the body you write “there are some reasons to having some restrictions rather than a complete ban” – that makes sense.

            You either need to change your introduction or change the language you use in the first body paragraph. Something must change to avoid having two opposite opinions given. Please feel free to try this one again.
            All the best
            Liz

  19. These days, it is common to find people using cell phones in various public places such as, markets, banks and reading rooms. In my opinion, I strongly believe public use of phones should be banned owing to several reasons which shall be discussed in this essay.
    Firstly, it constitutes a form of public disturbance. The use of mobile phones generates noise in public places since you have various people talking at various voice pitches. This noise most often is unbearable to people who are present in these places. They are distracted by this noise which often limits people’s activities whenever they need to engage in certain activities for instance, reading in a library. Noise is highly intrusive and is often a nuisance to most people.
    Furthermore, it is a potential health hazard. The generation of noise and radiation from the use of cell phones is seen as being harmful to health. Noise is known to be a form of pollution which is harmful to the human ear. There is a certain level of noise the human ear can adapt to. This level is exceeded by the use of mobile phones in public places as confirmed by medical experts. In addition, the generation of radiation by the use of cell phones also causes various cancers according to medical experts. This radiation is high when exposure to mobile phone radiations is more as seen in unrestricted use of mobile phones in public places.
    In conclusion, the use of cell phones should be highly restricted in public places so as to prevent its potential health hazard to people who are not aware of the harm. Failure to do this may cause a burden on the populace and the government when diseases emerge because of this.

    • Hi,

      This is a good essay. You have given a very clear answer in your introduction and you have supported and explained that answer in the body. Each paragraph has a clear central topic. It’s very good and is above band score 7. Point for improvement:

      Topics Sentence – This is the first sentence of a paragraph and contains the main point. You have written “Firstly, it constitutes a form of public disturbance.”. Your topic sentence has a clear main point but what does “it” mean? This is the first sentence of a new paragraph so the subject is unknown. This means you can’t use “it” as a subject in a topic sentence. So, you should have written “Firstly, using mobile phones in public areas constitutes a form of public disturbance.”. Make sure each topic sentence starts clearly.
      All the best
      Liz

    • hello tundea,
      excellent essay mate, i like the way you develop and present your ideas wish i could write like that. i don’t know why i end up writing all my essays in same style. may be i need to adapt different techniques, as i often struggle to develop my ideas and that’s the difference between band 7 and 8. anyhow, if you have time read my above essay any suggestion from you would be truly appreciated.

      cheers

  20. Hani Shaker says:

    Due to the rapid widespread of cell phones and the dazzling improvements that have overwhelmed this sophisticated industry, cell phones have become the norm to see everywhere rather than the exception. This has resulted in an exacerbated use of mobiles and has consequently urged many people to call for halting their use in public places such as malls, reading rooms and public transport means. Personally , although I critic the excessive use of cell phones in such places , I believe that they shouldn’t be entirely banned for some reasons which I intent to advocate in this essay . Here , I recommend that cell phones are to be used only in ultimate emergencies .

    Enthusiasts for banning the use of cell phones in public places argue that excess use of mobiles results in negative impacts on people and even catastrophic ones . . People usually get distracted and become less attentive to hazards surrounding them when calling someone or answering someone’s call because most of their focus and concentration is paid to the call . A stark example supporting that plea is the toll death and injuries afflicting the society everyday as a result of the careless use of mobiles in streets , while crossing high ways and even while driving over highways . In spite of the strength of this argument ,these negative impacts can be eliminated if sophisticated illuminating campaigns are to be launched to enhance people’s awareness concerning the potential risks of using cell phones in public places .

    Furthermore, adherents to the trend of prohibiting the use of mobiles in public places contend that most of street noise and nuisance are attributed to the vast use of cell phones in public places . It distracts people’s attention and results in negatively impacting their work output . For example , if cell phones were not banned in libraries , readers’ attention would be surely distracted and consequently their ability for assimilation would be limited . Nonetheless , such negative impact could be cancelled out through the use of headphones and smart mikes . Cell phones have become a must nowadays and humans couldn’t dispense with them . They have rescued the lives of many people through calling the police or ambulances in emergencies . If it weren’t for cell phones ,many lives would be lost . Take road causalities as a stark example , most of them are saved from certain death through a single call from a mobile phone .
    In conclusion , in spite of the negative impacts of using cell phones in public places , they shouldn’t be entirely banned . These negative impacts could be eliminated. Herein, I do recommend that cell phones should be only used for emergencies in public places .

    • Hi,

      Thanks for submitting your essay. As you probably know I don’t always comment on essays but I will give you some points to improve:

      1. This essay is 461 words in length – did you plan and write it in 40 mins? Most IELTS essays are between 260 and 280 – this completes the task and gives you time to focus on quality not quantity.
      2. “Enthusiasts for banning the use of cell phones in public places argue that ” – this essay is not about what other people argue. Each paragraph should explain your opinion and your view.
      3. Vocabulary: “dazzling improvements”, “sophisticated industry”, “supporting that plea “, “sophisticated illuminating campaigns “, “ability for assimilation” = these are all examples of using vocabulary inappropriately. This is an academic essay and vocabulary must be appropriate and also used in the right context. You have naturally good English, don’t try to put too much descriptive vocabulary into an academic essay and be 100% of your language – more errors = lower score.
      4. “shouldn’t” – don’t use contractions. Write everything in full.

      On the whole, you write well but to succeed in IELTS work on the quality rather than quantity of your writing. Also remember if the essay asks for your opinion, then you state your opinion in the introduction and explain your opinion in the body.
      All the best
      Liz

  21. Thanks alot madam.

  22. Hi madam ,
    I am weak in writing part so I try a little . Is this paragraph is enough for introduction?

    • Hi,

      The length is fine and your answer is clear but there are just a few issues with grammar and vocabulary.

      1. now a days = nowadays (one word)
      2. urging a demand of prohibiting it usage in public places = urging a demand to prohibit it being used in public places
      3. it creates a number of problems to people = it creates a number of problems (s) for people
      4. I am disagree with this opinion. In my point of view, …. = In my opinion, I disagree with because
      5. call phones should not banned anywhere – cell phones should not be banned everywhere
      6. whereas = but
      7. few measures = a few measures
      8. to avoid intrusive and other things = to avoid intrusion and other issues.
      Regards
      Liz

  23. Now a days , increasing usage of cell phone in public place urging a demand of prohibiting it usage in public place because it creates number of problem to people.I am disagree with this opinion.In my point of view, cell phones should not banned anywhere whereas we can take few measures to avoid the intrusive and other things.

  24. It is true that mobile phones are one of the major reasons for increased noise pollution in public areas. While I accept that there are some drawbacks to this technology, in my opinion, I believe banning cell phones completely would not be the long-term solution.

  25. The wide range of cell phones use recently are getting bigger and bigger. As well, the advantages of using it has become crucail for everyone. I disagree with the banned law, Since you are commitment to the puplic rules I don’t see any necessity to be prevented . But I’m with rationing the usag of mobiles phones. due to the privacy of certain places.

    “I wrote this as an introduction for the essay “

  26. It is often believed that the use of cell phones should be prohibited in certain public areas like malls and reading buildings .While I agree that callers must not use their mobile phones to disturb others in these places, I do not believe that they should not answer all calls due to three principal reasons.

    • Hi,

      I have two main comments:

      1. You don’t need to paraphrase all words to get a high score. In fact, not all words can be successfully paraphrased “reading buildings” is not really in the English vocabulary so that means you must use the word “library” repeatedly.
      2. I’m still not clear on your opinion because you write very clearly that “callers must not use their phones to disturb others” but then you write “I do not believe they should not answer all calls…” which means the opposite. Your opinion must be much clearer. Here’s an example “In my opinion, I do not believe that mobiles phones should be banned completely but I believe there should be strict limitations on when and how they are used”. Is that the opinion you are after?
      All the best
      Liz

      • Yes this is what I meant. I like to include a balanced opinion because this gives me the chance to write more.

      • Can this intoduction be okay?
        People have different views about whether to ban the use of mobile phones in punlic places such as malls and libraries.In my opinion , I disagree with the idea that mobile users must not answer all calls in these places due to three principal causes.

        Ms. Liz , can I still write about people who agree with this (in one paragraph) although I disagree(another paragraph)? Is my opinion clearer now?

        • Hi,

          If you disagree that mobile phones should be banned then your full essay should explain why you think they shouldn’t be banned. Any position you take but be supported through your entire essay. So, no it’s not possible to say you agree 100% with one side and then write a full body paragraph supporting the other side. Your whole opinion essay but explain why you believe what you believe.

          If you want to write about both sides then you must write “In my opinion, mobile phones should not be banned but should have restricted use in public places.”
          All the best
          Liz

  27. Hi Liz
    please tell me , what is the meaning by agree or disagree in writing taks 2 ?
    are we give both opinion in the task or we select one opinion and give reasons.
    thanks

    • Hi,

      It means you must state if you agree or if you disagree or if you have a specific opinion. Basically, it means you must give a clear opinion of what you think – it is not about discussing both sides or avoiding giving an opinion.
      All the best
      Liz

  28. Essay by a student named Tundea:

    These days, it is common to find people using cell phones in various public places such as, markets, banks and reading rooms. In my opinion, I strongly believe public use of phones should be banned owing to several reasons which shall be discussed in this essay.
    Firstly, it constitutes a form of public disturbance. The use of mobile phones generates noise in public places since you have various people talking at various voice pitches. This noise most often is unbearable to people who are present in these places. They are distracted by this noise which often limits people’s activities whenever they need to engage in certain activities for instance, reading in a library. Noise is highly intrusive and is often a nuisance to most people.
    Furthermore, it is a potential health hazard. The generation of noise and radiation from the use of cell phones is seen as being harmful to health. Noise is known to be a form of pollution which is harmful to the human ear. There is a certain level of noise the human ear can adapt to. This level is exceeded by the use of mobile phones in public places as confirmed by medical experts. In addition, the generation of radiation by the use of cell phones also causes various cancers according to medical experts. This radiation is high when exposure to mobile phone radiations is more as seen in unrestricted use of mobile phones in public places.
    In conclusion, the use of cell phones should be highly restricted in public places so as to prevent its potential health hazard to people who are not aware of the harm. Failure to do this may cause a burden on the populace and the government when diseases emerge because of this.

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