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Answers to improving sentence exercise

Answers to improving sentences.

Below you will find different ways sentences could be improved to get a higher band score in IELTS writing task 2.

International charities have large funds. Local charities have small funds.

  1. International charities have large funds, while local charities have small funds.
  2. Larger funds are available to international charities compared to local charities which have relatively smaller funds.

Some natural disasters affect thousands of people. These situations require the aid of international charities.

  1. Some natural disasters affect thousands of people and, therefore, require the aid of international charities.
  2. Natural disasters, such as earthquakes and tsunamis, can have disastrous consequences for thousands of people and for this reason the amount of aid required can only be provided by international charitable organisations.

Local charities know the needs of local people. Local charities can support both individuals and small groups.

  1. As local charities know the needs of local people, they are able to support both individuals and small groups.
  2. Local charities are able to support both individuals and small groups because they understand the needs of local people.

Local charities do not have big financial resources. They are still vital to the welfare of people within local communities.

  1. Even though local charities do not have big financial resources, they are still vital to the welfare of people within local communities.
  2. Despite local charities having limited funding and resources, they still play a vital role in providing support and caring for the welfare of people within local communities.

All charities need donations. International charities can draw donations from many wealthy countries. International charities have the money needed to promote their organisation. Local charities are less known but still require donations. Local charities must rely mainly on fund raising events.

  1. It is clear that all charities need donations in order to do their work effectively and offer aid when needed. International charities are able to draw donations from many wealthy countries through their capacity to promote their cause on a global scale. This is not the case with local charities who are not as well known and rely on receiving money through fund raising in local communities.
  2. It is clear that all charities need donations in order to do their work effectively and offer aid when needed. While international charities are able to draw donations from many wealthy countries through their capacity to promote their cause on a global scale, local charities are not as well known and rely on receiving money through fund raising in local communities. (This last sentence is very long. Do not try this unless you are excellent in English)

Let me know if this lesson was useful to you. 

Thanks

Liz

 

Comments

  1. HERLEEN KAUR says:

    Hi Liz,
    You helped me a lot for the test preparation. My ielts general exam is on 1st February. I wanted to ask you that can I use words such as ‘modus operandi’ instead of routine in any of the writing task or while my speaking test??
    Thanks in advance 😊

  2. This will really help me in improving sentence formation in writing task 2 as well as in speaking. Thanks a lot

  3. Hi Liz,
    You have done a great job!

  4. munawar hussain says:

    It was so much helpful

  5. M. Golam Faruk says:

    Hi Liz!
    Thanks a lot for your continuous support. I am getting very much help from your website and of course from video tutorials. Those are excellent to enhance my learning capacity.
    For today,s topic, can we use humanitarian organization/charitable organization instead of charities? Please suggest.
    After writing anything in MS word document, why can’t we paste in this portion of comment?

    • A humanitarian organisation isn’t always a charity. Charitable organisation – charity – aid organisation.

  6. Hello mam,

    How can I make this kind of sentences. What I will need to do… Please give tips so I can I make this kind of sentences

    • If you are struggling with your sentence structure, you will need to take English language lessons. Tips and techniques will not alter the level of your English. These lessons are for students who already have strong English grammar but need direction.

  7. Good way to learn use of 1. commas, 2. Statement starter like Natural disaster, earthquake and tsunami, 3. Useful words to remember like despite, even though, while etc.

  8. Thank u Liz , very useful information all over the blog.

  9. Tania Haque says:

    Dear Liz,
    I appreciate you all helps you put for IELTS planners. I am seeking your advice and cooperation’s on English writing skills. Please share any books (free) or links that can help me to improve my writing. It seems to me a only life savings tools. Wish you all the best. Please help me on improving writing. Thanks.

  10. Thank you Liz. It is very useful, i try to practise writing more.

  11. Thank you Liz,
    Sentences well extended with relevant preposition and linking phrases,
    Hopefully i too can write in my writing module
    Thanks a million
    Padmini

  12. emre pacaci says:

    Liz thank you so much for this lesson.It was really useful.

  13. Yasmine Bmz says:

    Hello Liz,
    Thanks a lot for helping out!

    If I do understand,” improving sentences” is mainly about paraphrasing and introducing transition words, is it?

    • It’s about a range of things: including more specific details, linking and paraphrasing.

      • Thanks Liz for the great work you’re doing.
        Please, I’d like to know if one is penalized for leaving any question unanswered. We are told to guess if unsure of an answer instead of leaving a blank space.
        Thanks.

        • Always guess. Don’t leave an empty space. You do not lose points for getting an answer wrong – so always guess. There is no penalty for an empty space – but it is crazy not to try and guess.

  14. Thank you very much, Liz.It was very useful!

  15. mam I hv One Qus If we r Agree with the Statement so we just write dwn only agree point or BP1 And Bp2 for agree Nd bp3 For disagree???

  16. Thank you so much Liz . Now I can see how to develop my sentence and how to extend it by extra detail.

  17. Liz pls tell me we use etc or not.or we use only etcetra in task 2

  18. Thank you Liz, very useful, compound sentences are very important. please if we can see other examples of linking words and the ways we can use them like Yet, Neither, For,.. (not frequently used but important) ,,, Thank you

  19. Thanks Liz for this lesson.
    This lesson is useful and hope to see some more exercises.

  20. Rawia Obida says:

    Hi Liz ,
    Is it applicable to paraphrase the word, for example instead of local charities, can i use reigonal charities?
    and instead of aid, can i use the word help?
    Many Thanks

    • Aid and help are not the same thing. Charities do help but they provide aid. The words are used differently. Regional is a broader term than local. Local often exists within a city or a few towns rather than a whole region.

  21. Thanks Liz for this lesson , after doing some of exercises I find this lesson very useful . Hope to see more of same type of exercise in the future.
    Thanks

  22. Liz don’t you think the last example is too long for a sentence.Ive always felt that sentences should be short with complete meaning.
    Do give me your valuable suggestion.

    Thanks

    • The last sentence is long. On the whole, most students should aim for shorter sentences. I have offered that example for the very highest level students. It is as long as is possible and can only be used by band 8.5 or 9 students. I’ve just added one more example for number 5 which is shorter and convenient for all students to use as a model. Check above again to see it.

      • Ashish Shah says:

        Thank you, specifically for adding that long sentence. It helps a lot to know exactly what is required to get 8.5/9 bands. It is crucial that we aim higher. I have subscribed to all your advanced writing lessons and i hope that it helps me to reach above 7 in writing which is currently at 6.5 {for both the attempts}. I plan to take the test next month. Any suggestions on how to practice for Writing?

        Thanks in Advance.

        Ashish

        • You definitely need to spend time learning ideas for topics. There are rarely new topics in writing. Nearly all topics have, at some time, been used before but with essay questions phrased differently. So, learn ideas. Also practice developing those ideas using no more than two to four supporting points. Then review your linking and make sure that you are not using any informal linking. Linking is crucial, easy to learn and yet so many students make mistakes with it, thinking that it isn’t important. After that review your sentence structures and tenses – review all common errors. Then review your techniques again from my videos and compare them with my model essays: http://ieltsliz.com/ielts-writing-task-2/. After, you’ll need to focus on task 1. Remember that although task 1 is only 33%, if you learn correctly, it will be an easy 33%.

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