Answer to yesterday’s paraphrasing exercise 3

Yesterday, I gave you the essay question below to paraphrase:

Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

On this page you will find

  1. model background statements for the above essay question
  2. good background statements posted by students
  3. a list of common mistakes
  4. a full model introduction
  5. useful link for writing task 2

Please let me know if you find this lesson useful

Model Background Statements

  1. As artists need freedom for their creativity, it is thought that there should be no limits to their freedom of expression.
  2. Some people believe that artists require freedom to be creative and therefore should have complete freedom to express any idea they have.
  3. Artists having complete freedom to convey any belief is thought by some to be paramount to an artist’s creative development.
  4. It is thought that without complete freedom of expression, an artist will not be able to be develop their creativity.

Interesting Background Statements from Students

  1. While it is generally understood that in order to be creative an artist must have some liberty to develop impulses and ideas creatively , some would argue that they should have full, and unrestricted, creative licence.
    1. Comment: This is a good background statement but too long. It’s a waste of time to write a long background statement and it won’t boost your score. But otherwise, this is well written with great vocabulary.
  2. It is considered by some that artists, in order to amplify their creativity, should be totally free to express their ideas and thoughts.
    1. Comment: This is the right length and well written. Just one mistake – the word “amplify” is incorrect. Avoid over paraphrasing – just use the word “develop”.
  3. Since art requires a level of freedom to be creative, some believe that artists ought to be granted all the freedom of expression they need.
    1. Comment: This is a great background statement. It’s written very well. The only thin I would change is the last word. I would change it from “need” to “want”.
  4. It is true that a level of liberty is required by artist to enhance their imaginative skills, but some people believe that artists should have unrestricted freedom in giving voice to their opinion and believe.
    1. Comment: I like this background statement. Nicely written. However, there are grammar mistakes: required by artists (plural needed) / to voice their opinions and beliefs (plurals needed).
  5. It is widely believed that artists ought to be given absolute freedom of expression, because freedom is essential in the development of their creative process.
    1. Comment: Well done 🙂

Common Mistakes in Paraphrasing

  • Artists = creators
    • this is wrong. The word artist means artist. You don’t try to paraphrase this.
  • Artists = people from art sphere
    • A mistake. It is obvious that paraphrasing the word “artist” is difficult. In fact, you shouldn’t try. Not all words in English can be paraphrased.
  • Some people = few people
    • this is wrong. You could write “a few people” but not “few people”. The term “few people” means “not enough people. It has a different meaning entirely.
  • It is always a topic of debate that
    • this shows the examiner you can’t write your own sentences and need to memorise phrases from a book. It will not help your score.
  • creativity = ingeniousness
    • completely wrong. Never paraphrase unless you are 100% sure. Mistakes will lower your score.

Full Model Introduction

Here is my model introduction. My thesis statement presents a partial agreement.

Some people believe that artists require freedom to be creative and therefore should have complete freedom to express any idea they have. In my opinion, while freedom of expression is important, art must be censored for violent or dangerous content.

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Comments

  1. Giving a level of freedom to artists is very essential for them, so they could be able to express their opinions and beliefs in a creative and amazing way.

    What do you think Liz?

    • Some people are believed that giving a level of freedom to artists is very essential for them, so they could be able to express their opinions and beliefs in a creative and amazing way.

  2. Some people think that Artists require freedom to encourage their creativity, while many others believe that Artists ought to have no limit freedom to express their ideas and thoughts.

  3. The degree of freedom in which artists’ creativity can be developed has always been a controversy , while it is thought by some there should be no limit.

  4. Some people feel that artists should not be restricted by anyone in expressing their thoughts and ideas. While I agree that artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity, I feel that this freedom should not be absolute.

  5. Great and awesome lesson. Thanks you Liz

  6. Usman rafique says:

    Informative

  7. Simranpreet kaur says:

    Hi! Liz
    Is it right to use ‘Succinctly’ instead of ‘To conclude’ or ‘In a nutshell’.

  8. Thans so much Liz, it was very useful and helpful.

  9. Thank you Liz

  10. Great help thanks Madam

  11. Neena Kamran says:

    Please give suggestions! Iam still waiting 🙁
    Although some people think that expression of ideas and imaginations by artists should be under some limitations, others believe that it is required to improve their creativity.

    • I do not offer free marking service. I chose 5 introductions and commented on them. I will not give comments to 100 students.

  12. mary malondo says:

    artist require freedom to a certain extend to build up there creativity,part of the population feel that artists should have complete freedom to express any mind and ideas.However in my view i don’t agree with the access to complete freedom

  13. memoona amin says:

    Hey Liz…….thanks for your great lesson and tips…your work for students is really helpful and appreciable👍🏼

  14. Ganesh kumar says:

    Hello mam.I cant understand the fact that
    Crativity=ingeniousness is wrong.
    Please explain why it is wrong because I found creativity=ingeniousness in the theasurus.com

  15. Hi Liz, much appreciated

  16. Great! Really love your videos and tips!

  17. Hi Liz…let me express my sincere gratitude to you for the lessons.
    This is very useful for my writing. Thank u once again.

  18. Hello Liz,
    Thanks a lot for your help. This lesson is so important. The writing seccion is my big problem.

  19. Hi liz , your lessons really useful

  20. Hi, Liz!
    Great lesson and tips! Thank you!
    Could you please comment my paragraph?… It was my first exercise, actually.
    Watching ALL your videos!

  21. Thank you Liz, its a great opportunity for my improvement.

  22. Astounding work done by Liz
    M impressed n hoping to learn more from respected Liz
    My bestest regards

  23. thank you sister for this it helps me to revise.

  24. Hi, Liz!
    Great exercise! It would be wonderful if you prepared more stuff like this (with model answers)
    Thanks

  25. Hlo mam
    I’m little confuse that you are partial agree but you did not mention in introduction.
    And is it mandatory to mention in introduction part that agree or disagree?

    • You must give your opinion that is what the examiner is looking for. You do not need to use the words “agree” or “partially agree”.

  26. The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subject for country to develop and progress.

    After paraphrasing
    Although many would argue that other subjects has a greater role in education,i think the nation should assign more subsidy to science subject for its prosperity.

  27. Neena Kamran says:

    Please give suggestions!
    Although some people think that expression of ideas and imaginations by artists should be under some limitations, others believe that it is required to improve their creativity.

  28. Anupama verma says:

    Hi Liz
    I really like your tips and lessons. They help me a lot in preparing for the exam. My query is .. can we talk of both pros and cons in the ques to what extent you agree…

  29. Hi Liz! How is it correct to say: English teacher or teacher of English? ☺
    Thanks in advance!

  30. Thank mam

  31. Mohammad Abdus Salam says:

    It’s really great!!! Thanks Liz. I think I’m getting benefited by using your guidance.

  32. kalaivanan pullaiannan says:

    Thank you mam your suggestion.

  33. Hi Liz, thanks for this great introduction tips lesson. I was wondering if you had the full version of the written essay? Cheers.

  34. Hi, Liz, Thank you, it is very useful.

  35. Nahida Akther says:

    According to a few people there is no alternative of liberty to present artists imagination in the creative work. I think free thinking and academic knowledge are also important.

  36. Oh yay…I see mine there and I got the “well done”, thanks Liz, im quite encouraged…..but I’m still struggling with achieving the perfect length of introduction…. I’m still hitting about 70 words, I need to whittle that down to about 50words before 30th….will keep practicing…. Thanks again Liz

  37. Abdoalmanim Alshaibi says:

    Thank you Liz, so valuable lessons

  38. Thanks ma’am your teaching is always on point

  39. Thanks liz
    First time i asked a ques and u reply.l’m great fan of u.liz u r real eg of beauty with brain.

  40. To those who didn’t spot their own background statement in this post (including me): don’t give up and be positive, practice makes perfect 🙂

    And thank you, Liz, for those valuable lessons.

  41. I ‘m sorry….I wait for your lessons daily….

  42. Thank you liz for the great work…..I wait for your everyday.

  43. Hi Liz, Thankyou for this. I will keep practising.

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